My tears dance away, like butterflies on the wind,
No longer does my sadness weigh upon my soul.
I am freed and set alight with joy.
Brimming with the endless possibilities,
Of a being in first flight.
A celestial body, previously unknown to myself.
A contest entry
- Tomorrow, The Sun Will Rise by Cyclical.
450 points, ended January 15, 2008, 23 entries
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Its amazing that you can express you self in such few words. Very talented.. beautiful. So descriptive (I can actually FEEL the things you are describing)
Sydney
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This is like a trip into the Silver age where we evolve above the common human and see our true spiritual worth. A new and more beautful kind of love. Great piece of poetry. -
SO LOVELY!!!!
As one comes to find peace in their heart a new awakening and light comes to show them a new way, a new life filled with serenity and bliss.
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I so agree...peace in your soul is the beginning to opening our hearts to the Lord. What a mighty blessing that is!
BLESSINGS, Doris
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oh yes i can realy relate to this
as i have traveledf out of body many times
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Wow. Very nice. This describes what will happen to us all, and in our dreams we get glimpses of it. A very lovely write dear.
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Lightness captured in veritable flight, hugs lib x x
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True freedom bringing unbelievable joy. I can feel any burden I've ever felt lifted, you describe it very well.
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Ah, to experience the freedom you describe in this poem! It certainly is wonderful to imagine!
Thank you so much for entering! -
Excellent Writing
This lifted me up. -
Beautiful picture painted with such flair.
I love it.
This sounds a lot like...a certain phenomenon I've been wrapped up in lately. Into a plane of higher consciouness. This really hit home.
"My tears dance away...I am freed and set alight with joy." --Such a great message portrayed here. So full of hope. No longer held back by the chains of darkness and depression.
Wonderful write.
I really enjoyed reading it.
Peace && Blesses,
~Rain
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Wonderful...this seems to relate to me as I am sure other's have felt it too...
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I can't wait to see when you come out of your shell!
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BREATH TAKING!!
To know ones self is to be truly free!...A celestial body, previously unknown to myself...My tears dance away, like butterflies on the wind...sighs...so very beautiful!
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This is beautiful and stunning, I really love this one, it speaks volumes to the heart, I love the last line, as you capture the release of a heavy weight, you discover your celestial soul WOW WOW and triple WoW! Excellent
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Sadness upon the soul
Oh to be free of that.. I do envy you
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beautifully written... i am freed and set alight with joy.... gorgeous line!
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