Surrounding you.
I jump and leap, mind's eye will keep me,
Close to you.
In the depths of the world,
I linger and twirl,
In all places I lay,
To be caught 'mongst the play,
Only upon the earths surface.
I stand and I lift,
The blue from the world,
Loving the luscious nature of it,
Of the sky and the sea,
As I lay in awe beneath those fine surfaces,
And dream of flying.
Grounded, I stretch,
For miles or one breath of time,
And vary, depending on where on Earth,
I've fallen, and why,
And how it was I came to lie,
In this place, among this space,
To stare forever at the stars,
Trampled on, livied in,
Many things I did begin,
I will always represent Life.
When rest upon
your eyes.
I am new life,
I am new world,
I am rebirth, and,
I am not
sex specific.
I am the ground that doth surround you,
In all the spleandour of your nature.
I am revitilisation, regeneration,
Relaxation, full hydration,
Envy too, I spose could be said,
But I am never something dead.
I'm life, I live and joy I give,
As I wend and twist amongst the rainbows,
Showering and never seen,
Oh to rise above the earth -
I am part of everything.
Even the sky and sea.
The eyes of you and me.
I am a colour, free.
Author notes
Honesty appreciated, and sorry if it's a bit long winded. I like it I suppose, Cheers for readin
What colour did you think it was?
Oh yeah, and, it's Green.
A contest entry
- Colors Of Peace - 24 hr quickie by CarolDesjarlais.
900 points, ended October 15, 2007, 8 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Opinions? Critisism? Beware, if the comments i see to bemisplaced, prepare to defend your reasoning. Many thanks.
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Silly goose...you ask what color we thought it was then you say it's green...**laughs** But it's a stunning poem...Nature draws so much beauty from our souls...and you put it into words so well!!!!
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Beautiful work here. It sends out such a beautiful feeling throughout. I couldn't figure out that this was about the color green- must have been my slow brain cells.
Your structure is amazing. I love the depth of your piece and your imagery is stunning. Awesome write! Best of luck!
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This is a well-written poem...the title was missing but I got the gist of it...did you mean it to be a hug?
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lol erm... no... it says in the author notes that it's the colour green. I sorta missed the 'peace' bit n just wrote about a colour lol so i was pretty lost . I preferred it untitled as the only apt titles literally translate to 'green' n i thought this was a "show dont tell"... lol maybe i submitted it wrong or maybe i was in a rush but either way it was fun n i felt like i achieved what i meant to lmao
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Fun reading
This was fun reading - but not what I had in mind for Peace . .
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I figured that this was green lol! You did a fantastic job, I love the color green, every shade. Your words were great and the flow eased off the screen. Great job and good luck
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Thankyou darl! Its a cool contest!
I love writing this, and I loved to reread it.... Cheers for reading!!!
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