She once was a normal child
until that fateful day
She laughed, she loved, and she cried.
On all Hallow's Eve she went trick or treating for the very first time.
He was in a drunken escapade.
Going 80 in a 35 zone.
He filled his empty heart with alcohol
until he would collapse.
She was ready to have a fun filled night,
with candy, costumes, and fright.
He took her life,
and the Grim Reaper came.
But he came not for the girl
but for the man,
for he was never the same.
Author notes
Please have a happy and safe Halloween this year. Stop drunk driving and help make this world a safer place.
A contest entry
- "Grim"---Picture Inspired Contest by Ethereal One.
900 points, ended October 20, 2007, 7 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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that waz really good
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wow
i really don't know what to say. that was...incredibly deep. wow just wow.
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Thank you.
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WOW...
this poem is.. deep, adn very real. I really love it!!
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Thanks for the comment.
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This is truly sad, did this really happen. I'm sorry if it did, and hope that you have moved on. Drunk driving is a daily battle unfortunately. Thanks for reminding all to rethink thier lives and to choose a better path. UNT
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I think I may have read it in an old newspaper clipping. I can't remember. Thank you for the comment.
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very good message
I like the message you have sent in this poem. So sad that some people have to drink and hurt innocent people. I like this line:
"He filled his empty heart with alcohol
until he would collapse."
Your ending lines really give the reader a surprise!
Thank you for entering this contest, and good luck!
Ethereal One
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Thank you.
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I can really see, you dies at the end,
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That's great! I love it, I was so surprised by the ending.
the meaning's clearer than I'm used to and the setting more obvious but it's pretty sweet.
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Thank you.
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"But he came not for the girl
but for the man,
for he was never the same."
Beautiful piece.
Great message.
This contains a lot of imagery for such a short piece- wonderful!
And I love that ending.
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i loved every second of this poem...when you write you write...that made no since but thats okay...every time you put something out...its amazing
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Excellant/intriguing/challenging
A very fine write with a good purpose behind it. Which reminds me of my poem: "Reflections on the Drive In Movies", which is not about movies. Here's a link for those who haven't read it: http://allpoetry.com/poem/2865562 -
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