My gaze sweeps down from on this cloud,
To trees and fields and rivers blue,
The sight, pristine, God has allowed,
My lofty home, I'm born anew.
As leaves turn shades of red and gold,
And creatures small and great draw near,
The perfect balance I uphold,
For I'm the only man up here.
Hereon my porch two ravens nest,
And crickets chirp throughout the night,
The calming stir of dawn's request,
Brings back these tears I will re-fight.
This mountaintop brings love and pain,
And memories of what we held,
My silence's how I complain,
I always sing, I am compelled.
Author notes
Specifically written to my friend, the meandering bear, who is trying to help me get back into the world of poetry. I've been out of it since June, when my fiancee cancelled our wedding...
A contest entry
- "Rhymes and Reasons" by meanderingbear.
1800 points, ended October 14, 2007, 6 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
It's been a while, I hope I still got it...
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I love the emotions expressed here.
I am so sorry about your fiance. I know love can be hard, and I know we have hopes and dreams that are sometimes shattered and this can disilluion us. Please never give up poetry.
You have obvious talent. I love your imagery. I felt swept away as I was reading this piece.
I especially love the "my silence is how i complain". Wonderful. Seriously, how many of us feel like that? I honestly also think this emotion is felt most palpably by women - we truly become disillusioned with our partners, and one day, we just can't fight anymore.
Best of luck to you with the future. Again, keep writing.
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Hoodwinked
I am sorry for your loss of your fiance. I think this poem was great. Plus it won a silver trophy. You will get back into the swing of things. -
Hoodwink!
This is a very beautiful piece, with amazing imagery, and filled with inspiration. Wonderfully crafted and great rhyme and assonance. A much enjoyable read!
Congrats on the silver, well deserved!
Love & Light
Debbera
You have been hoodwinked by "The Poetic Bandits!
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Hood Wink!!
This is such a beautiful piece, it is hard toget back into the swing of things but you have done it with style... this is full of wonderful images for the reader to walk away with... I hopeyou enjoy being ambushed by your Poetic Bandit friends
Karen
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Hood-Winked!
I agree you are very talented!! I am so sorry for what happened to you. But I feel good things for you love will find you again don't ever give up hope What an amazing poem so full of wonderful imagery and emotion. I so enjoyed reading.
You have just been Hood-Winked courtesy of the Poetic Bandits
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You still have IT, my friend! Thank you so much for entering this contest...means a lot to me!
Carolyn
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