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China white moon

China white hanging in the black of the sky
Cratered face still smiling brightly
Ghost like in the gloom of night
Forever staring down at us
Lidless eye without a pupil
Sightless in the constant satin
Pouring from the wound
Soft white glow of the moon
 
Let go of false perceptions
See the world through your third eye
Let go of the fear of death
Slowly let nature take effect
The hate and loathing of being alone
Inside the mind is where the horrors grow
You see the world for the very first time

Lycanthrope
Shape shifting kin
Animal boiling deep within
Eyes open for the first time
To stare into the void
Changing now and soon perfect
Letting nature take effect
The snap and tearing of new grown bones
The anger boils against my soul
Lycanthrope and into the night
The hunt begins fresh again

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  • TerrifiedSky silver member
    October 13, 2007
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    My only suggestion, and please tell me if I've over stepped my welcome, would be to change:

    Letting nature take effect

    this line in your last stanza because you use a similar line in the previous stanza and I feel it takes away from the over all feel of the poem.

    Much love,
    Jessica