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A Waltz

So begins the dance of time,
twisting ‘round and ‘round this rhythmic rhyme
endless steps and pirouettes
finding place in joys and regrets

Tip-toeing breathlessly
one moment to the next
to keep their pace
their bodies never vexed

Sorry sweet notes for hire
vibrations tumbling down the wire
resonating soundly through the air
intermixing with their speed, touch, and despair

Strumming, drumming tired tones
bodies shaking, quaking with rusty groans,
a waltz of endless, streaming desire
for the ones who would maintain such hypnotic fire.

The hands that bind their steaming bond.
Eyes locked, steadfast and fond
Hair spinning as the world goes around
Place by place their places found

The dancehall floor, a dizzying place
A forward gaze, then tipped back into space.
Falling, falling together and alone
Sustaining a rhythm none can condone

Ever the while their hearts alight
pounding to the touch and the fright.
Dancing within more than without
pulled closer to whisper their thoughts aloud.

Mutual suffering and hush aside
t’was only in the other the could confide.
The heaving, pulsing drone, a melancholy dance
wonderfully lost in their common trance.

The beat rising, holds grow tight
the moves of their bodies, now of one mind
their feet evermore graceful and light
comfort in keyed chaos they did find

Their souls soaring far and near
To nothingness and all that’s here.
Daring defiance in each and every step
Each passing moment marked and kept

Where two once began one did remain
changed forever, gladly becoming the same.
A separated entity of emotion
forged amidst the noise and motion

The break, bow, both strain for breath
His smile ragged, truth in his eyes.
“Keep close to me, and now until death
I’ll catch you when you fall, and always dry your eyes”

Author notes

a collab with my dear friend http://allpoetry.com/Willieson
he is a magnificent poet, read his work :]

critiques appreciated :]

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  • Summer Dawn
    November 24, 2007
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  • penciledlives
    November 23, 2007
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    I like the rhyme scheme. It didn't sound forced. The words you chose too painted a dreamy, magical aura, which added a lot to the poem. The last line I didn't really like...it sort of broke the flow for me. Still, it's a really great poem. I'm bad at rhyming, so reading good rhyming poems always make me go whoa.

    • TragicEyes
      November 25, 2007
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      thankyou so very much!!
      this poem is very dear to me since a good friend of mine and I did it together, your compliment means a lot ^_^