[ how can I express this answer? ]

how can I express this answer?

I ask myself why she
loves me -
or if not loves .. might someday love ...

she isn't running - scary in itself.

I am left to ponder the merits of being
and whether I am worthy
of a beautiful
shiny
round
thing

or if I am deluded - am lost
on foreign ground.

I love her none-the-less.

these tears do not encompass all of my hope.

In a list

Silver Shiny Things • next in list
Muse Inspired • next in list

A contest entry

Tell me why by astralshepherd. 450 points, ended October 16, 2007, 37 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest

Please tell me what you think (Critical Honesty Appreciated)

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astralshepherd
October 16, 2007

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Thank you so much for entering this contest, it means a great deal to me and I truly do appreciate your efforts. This is an expressive poetic vision reaching far beyond the scope of contest or prompt with a depth found in very gifted poets. The time spent here on this poem, has been very gratifying and fulfilling as it is one of the poems that has answers and truly does, tell me why. Blessings and best wishes, ~r

1) Content 9
2) Originality 9.5
3) Flow 9

4) Word choice (vocabulary and/or rhyme) 9
5) Imagery 8.5
6) Grammar 9

7) Form 9
8) Spelling 10
9) Emotional Impact 9.5
10) Rumination factor (how well does the poem make me ponder) 9.5
astralshepherd’s completely subjective total score = 92
NurseChilly
October 14, 2007

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it's reet! ya soft git... shut yer clackin' lass
and get on with it

whatever it is... and you missed my drunken escapade last night

lolol
Melissa Gayle
October 13, 2007
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Beautiful.
Suzanne Dia
October 13, 2007

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Alreet (in my best manchester accent)
somet to make you relax.

Back at you. You have a beautiful heart.

Stay true to it
- EvilKate
  October 13, 2007
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