I, await the celestial display
The full Moon passing through our Earth's shadow.
moonlight threw reflections across the bay,
Lunar eclipse looking out my window.
The Earth lying between the sun and moon.
Begins its entry as shadows umbra.
darkness wraping around with a cocoon,
circle of light shines though the penumbra.
Awesome aura shining in the night sky.
While the shadow creeps across the Moon's face.
Observing it with our naked eye,
looking with wonder, spectacular in space.
Giving credit to The Most High's creation.
Lunar display meets our expectations.
Author notes
http://xark.typepad.com/photos/uncategorized/polar_moon.JPG
Written in sonnet form.
A lunar Eclipses
Prompt One: The picture
In a list
A contest entry
- Moonlight by crivanea.
300 points, ended October 4, 2008, 27 entries
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very nice job painting the picture..thnx for the entry..this is beautiful in form/verse..best of luck in the contest
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this is a very beautiful poem! i love the vivid writing. thank you so much for entering my contest and i wish you the best of luck! NineTailedFox
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I enjoyed your use of vocabulary very much and thank you for entering.
Many people tell me that repeating of words is a poetic device and considered to be repetition. I don't really consider it that way, even though I've written a column on poetic devices, I guess it's just a personal quirk. I don't mind when complete verses are repeated, but when it's just words, it seems forced; as if the word is being used for the sake of the rhyme...like I said, perhaps just a personal quirk. -
That is an amazing picture and you have written a nice sonnet here to accompany it. I'm not sure I like the rhyming of shadow and overshadow...well it's just repetition rather than rhyme. You have taught me two new words here, umbra and penumbra. I really like them actually.
Thanks for your entry and good luck in my contest
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Very beautifully done...Good sonnet. i too have written on the picture...Both the poems sound so different.
All the best!
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A shakespearian sonnet, well done.
The first thing I noticed is that there are too many "..." they take away from the poem. If there was only 1 set it would be fine, but you have 6.
Some of it feels a little disjointed "The darkness en-wraps us in a cocoon,/circular shadow…as the penumbra."
Lastly the rhyming couplet at the end does not flow well, another syllable would do wonders for the last line (ie. our expectation, rather than ...expectation)
Anyway, thank you for entering and good luck in the contest -
This is beautiful. Such wonderful imagery. This poem had me thinking just now that I don't think I've ever observed an eclipse. I know there have been solar and lunar eclipses in the past, I think there was a lunar one recently sometime last month, if I'm not mistaken. But, I think it happened on a weekday early in the week and I was too tired to go outside to look at it. Good luck in the contest.
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