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Answer Me

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Answer Me

inspired by you, written by man,
Basic Instructions Before Leaving Earth.
follow your path to eternity
or follow the road to hell.

the passages coherent, lending hope and light,
unmitigated perception with reoccurring junctions,
sadistically imposed, the result of Adam’s folly.

will you accept my honesty, when I kneel to pray?
I fail to see the humor, in what you call a gift,
to feed on human naivety, calling it free will.

if scripture is a map, to find the road to take;
is it so encrypted, that the path I took was wrong?
for every time I follow it, I find another junction,
with demons that attack me, as I go on my way.

I stand alone upon the path, the one that is less trod.
I see fortune that I miss, had I stayed with the crowd.
yet, I still believe and I’ll pass your horrid test
and when I reach the end, you can tell me why.

 

 

 

 

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  • EvilKate
    November 21, 2007
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    Very nice work.

    Thanks for being patient with the judging delay.


  • Viyanna Rosemarie silver member
    November 5, 2007

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    this is a very good write from you. one well worth reading. you did a very good job on this write and i wish you well in this contest that we both have entered. viyanna rosemarie


  • Sacrificial Love
    October 22, 2007

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    Oh my...oh my....

    tears in my eyes...
    and I so identify with the words you have spilled forth...I am so amazed at how you give such a beautiful mental image...such a strong emotional wave...all through your words...you never cease to amaze me...and...this plight??? This plight you speak of??? The cup that is drank from ... but not understood what is being swallowed??? I know this cup all too well...you worded it so very eloquently and so beautifully....You are incredible dear...

    xoxo


  • Titus gold member
    October 15, 2007

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    Sublime! I am in awe of your writing, it is magnificent. It sounds so personal but at the same the gusto in this it truly very energetic in playback.


  • Desire gold member
    October 15, 2007

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    Magnificent!!

    First I wanted to say~ love the message
    within the message
    also the format You presented this!!
    Powerful piece Beautiful
    I realized when I walked...
    at times the path would take a shape
    like that in Alice in Wonderland...
    just veer off into some foreign territory

    ~*~
    if scripture is a map, to find the road to take;
    is it so encrypted, that the path I took was wrong?
    for every time I follow it I find another junction
    with demons that attack me, as I go on my way.
    ~*~

    Thank You for sharing Your Talent
    Best wishes to You in the contest
    Many blessings too
    and much love~ Desire~*~

  • Suzanne Dia
    October 15, 2007
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  • PerVirtuous
    October 15, 2007

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    I came back to this. The message in this is really one of faith. You follow the path without knowing why. Even though it leads you to places where you are attacked by demons. Even though you are often alone. It is a shame you do not see the humor in free will... it is one of the best parts of the gift! It allows us to balance the morbidity and harshness of reality with the delight of creative irony.

    Yes, it is a horrid test. Yes, you will pass. That is all that matters.


  • Akimbo
    October 13, 2007

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    bravo!

    I love the message and obvious effort imparted here. The acrostic line is so well chosen... and that touches upon what i like best about this. It is the theme given that is brought fully to life; judge the writing not the opinions rendered.

    That said, I love what you did with this. Though I (only being me and not you) would have phrased a couple of lines differently... it is all about the message.

    I applaud such tenacity with undying respect... I would be proud to stand side by side with such attitude.
    More power to you,
    Thanks,
    Kj


    • Amera gold member
      October 13, 2007
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      what a wonderful comment; thankyou


  • misticmoonlite gold member
    October 13, 2007

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    This poem is so true to your contests ,nice read as you chose words to be strong,good luck in the contest,MM


  • jo-el
    October 13, 2007

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    another thought-provoking offer. throughout you make considerable observations and ask penetrating questions. ah the question of free will. that's always a hard one. but how else are we to grow and eventually resemble our Father's own autonomy? if we can't make decisions for ourselves we would never be able to believe in ourselves. hmmm...there seems to be a struggle in the voice of the speaker. and though struggle is no picnic, and never to be envied, it makes the speaker more authentic to me. always a pleasure to read your work and this piece no less. most excellent expression

    • Amera gold member
      October 13, 2007
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      Thank you Jo'el, you are so right and I'm impressed that you picked up on it. Most of my poems are simply for the art but this came from my spirit.


  • HaleyMary
    October 13, 2007

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    Powerful write, Sis. This made me think of life and how sometimes it doesn't always seem fair. Even when people try to do the best they can and treat others well and with respect it seems like rewards just doesn't come a person's way. I liked the ending of this piece. It made me think of how even if we don't understand why we have to got through something at the time, we may feel like there is some reason that we have been taken down a particular path in life and that there are probably lessons to be learned. Good luck in the contest.


    • Amera gold member
      October 13, 2007
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      Thank you; you understood everything I was trying to say.


  • sunny day
    October 13, 2007

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    You never cease to amaze me and you left me sitting here with my jaw sitting in my lap on this one. The BASIC instructions are quite detailed and it's as though I were listening to Him speak. It was a joy to see free verse from you here, not very often we get to enjoy that from your golden pen. It flowed softly like His word should and went straight from the page to my heart. I will walk that path with you anytime. He is the reason we are here, given up by his Father so that man may be forgiven. A very spiritual write you have penned and it sounds golden to me. Best wishes in the contest, though I don't think you will be needing them with this one. Love you my friend, Joyce

    • Amera gold member
      October 13, 2007

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      Thank you so much Joyce It's a bit different I agree. First of all a free verse from me and also a twist on what most of us think but are afraid to say to God.


  • StarEyes
    October 13, 2007

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    A rare Freeverse from our one and only Miss Form Queen! and dare I say, an amazing one at that! You did better that fantastic and amazing on this one! I love it!

    Best of luck in this contest!

    and much love

    Nyetta

  • PerVirtuous
    October 13, 2007
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    This is wonderful and full of brilliance. You scare me when you write like this... Your understanding is amazing... I smell a winner here!


  • Laura
    October 13, 2007

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    ohhh wow i love it when you do something totally different and un-natural to yourself... this is amazing love and well deserved gold xxx

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