A thousand lovers have walked these sands
with hands entwined and minds infused with future
as unfettered feet left playful prints
along the winding line of shore's foaming edge.
A thousand gulls with bellies full of young
have rested weary wing in spring
upon this aged rock, hewn from mountain
by earth shaken, yet solid still.
A thousand ships have sipped this wind
through ardent, masted straws
from massive concave cups of cloth
till wooed in drunkenness to harbor.
Yet I,
I look into the hollowness of hope
Seeking the beauty of your whispers
to rise as mist from off the crests
of this same sea--
Steady with the flow of continuance,
Left only
to visualize your face
in the clouds.
Author notes
Collab by: Soulful Woman and ten thousand cicadas
In a list
A contest entry
- Pair Me a Poem II - Invite only by CarolDesjarlais.
1200 points, ended October 14, 2007, 4 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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wonderful piece!
thanks for the comment on "you i desire", it's not one of my best, there are some that are much more erotic than that one! hehehe
i loved the way you took this piece from a poem about nature and twisted it to yourself... i like twists!
keep on penning!
mike, aka jonathan wikkins -
Lovely collab! Lots of Lovely aLliterations! An enjoyable read. I especially enjoyed Stza 1 L3, and all of the third stanza--beautiful sea-faring images! Melancholy "hollowness of hope/seeking the beauty of your whispers". Final 3 lines, strong finish. Very nice! Congrats on the bronze!
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beautiful... a lot of wonderful sounds
to wrap the mind around in this piece... extremely visual... the imagery is amazing and there is quite a bit of emotion to this piece... lovely!
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Beautiful evocative sound to this poem. Your voices meld together like voices of ancients.
Of all the thousands of voices... I hear one... of all the thousands of faces, I see one....
this touched me in a holy harbor.
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This is a gorgeous write.
The imagery is vivid and word usage is very nice.
A wonderful collaboration.
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