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Woman

On a rainy Sunday evening
With nothing much to do,
I was shuffling through
my messy old drawer.
I was totally bored
with this monotonous task
When one thing suddenly caught my sight,
A picture of a young girl.


I stared at the photo,
It looked quite old,
I kept looking at her,
Into her deep, echoing eyes.
They were calm with a lively restlessness,
They were excited but
with an amount of contemplation,
deep, powerful eyes.

At once a sense of déjà vu gripped me,
I seemed to have seen her before,
Yes, I knew her.
Not as a person,
But as an idea, a concept,
I knew what she represented, what she was
Beyond her mortal self.

I know it’s vague,
But that’s what came to my mind,
That’s what I felt.
Her eyes seemed to tell her tale.


They seemed to tell me that
She was a great human, ahead of her time,
Free in spirit, powerful in ideas,
Wise, brave and immense……

She seemed to be far away
Untouched by the world
that did not recognize her.
All alone her sharp gaze
Seemed to focus on some distant future
For her ideas to transform to reality.

In my mind a question arose,
Was that all she was?
A picture meant to be lost
In my messy drawer?

I seemed to know the answer,
Her ideas, her thoughts,
Her joys, her sorrows,
Were all just too great.

She was not a human,
She was a ‘Woman’.



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Nivedita Bhattacharjee

Option 1 (for contest by Redlights)
Option 1(Prewrite) for Porcelain Dolls&& Harlequin Dreams Contest

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  • Ryno
    June 5, 2008

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    While I think this piece could've used stronger imagery that applied to each of our sense and less descriptions and spiced its phrasing up a little bit... I really, really liked this piece because of the raw feeling that was taken into it.

    I was expecting a stronger ending or something that would really give me a stronger feeling, but all the same I liked the idea behidn this

    Thanks for your entry!!


  • Razor-Blade Romance
    November 22, 2007
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    Nicely done.
    I love the use of language and emotion.
    Thanks for entering

  • kitkat92
    November 10, 2007
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    ha!

    heres to all guys hehehe, its very good and the imegry is great, thanx for entering

  • LapisLazuli
    November 3, 2007

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    She was not a human,
    She was a ‘Woman’.

    Wow! Awesome! I loved the above lines.
    It's a desciption, it is not only description but a philosophy itself.
    I am overwhelmed by the mystic touch of this poem.


  • Re-invention silver member
    October 30, 2007

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    ok. a very nice poem. felt like that too. please put your name in the AN. thank you for entering loved it!


    • Nivedita
      October 31, 2007
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      Thanks! I'm really glad that you liked it. I've put my name in AN.


  • TheLostGirl
    October 30, 2007

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    I like this it shos the power o a woman through just an image it also shows the influence of one grea poem and good luck.


  • Viyanna Rosemarie silver member
    October 26, 2007

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    i would like to thank you for entering this contest to make me feel something. i am wishing you the best of luck in this contest and in all your future writings. viyanna rosemarie

  • sociaL IntollErance
    October 22, 2007
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    WOW amazing i loved this so much its incredible


    • Nivedita
      October 23, 2007
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      Thank you so much for going through my poem. It really feels great to be appreciated.


  • Griswold gold member
    October 21, 2007

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    Very well written for this unusual contest, A great write indeed, very well done. Bless you in all you do...Scott


  • Nam
    October 21, 2007

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    I felt when reading the entirety of the poem, that it would have read better if it were left-aligned, and not centered.

    Other than that, a nice poem that you have written here.


    • Nivedita
      October 22, 2007
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      Thank You for your suggestion. You are right, the poem reads betters when it is left-aligned. I edited it.

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