Sometimes when I lay in bed,
The thoughts that run through my head,
Are disturbing even to me.
Sometimes when I see you there,
I cannot help but stare,
You can never know I love you.
Sometimes when I am sleeping,
I can hear the angels weeping,
Soft whimpers for the perfect match not together.
Sometimes when I awaken,
My only thought is how you are taken,
Then I slip back into the jaws of depression.
Sometimes when I talk to you,
My heart yearns to be 'the two',
I can never acheive that wish.
Sometimes on a cold winters morning,
I can see your breath just when day is dawning,
I wish our breaths were in time.
Author notes
Not sure if this was the kind of thing you wanted, but oh well
A contest entry
- SOMETIMES: A word to use for this poem. by Angel Full Of Hurt.
666 points, ended October 28, 2007, 16 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Break my heart. by black-angelwings-.
300 points, ended November 4, 2007, 31 entries
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Good poem but I'm afraid it's not right to the topic of the contest. Sorry but I don't think it will do. You're welcome to submit something else though.
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Very good
You portray a vision of life for so many good luck in the contest
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Thankyou
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What a great piece to sink one's mind into. This shrouds me in such sweet tranquilty. Thank you for sharing and best wishes to you. Keep that pen handy dear poet. ~Midnight Lace
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excellent poem you have written-the yearning unfulfilled passion jumps from the page. Fool that doesn't notice you!!! Good luck in the contest
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Thankyou
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it's good
wow thanks for entering, i like this poem..good good good...u followed the instructions and the rules...brilliant...i like this poem more because the poet is careful and good...i like the words =)
Sometimes when I see you there,
I cannot help but stare,
You can never know I love you.
Sometimes when I am sleeping,
I can hear the angels weeping,
Soft whimpers for the perfect match not together.
Sometimes when I awaken,
My only thought is how you are taken,
Then I slip back into the jaws of depression.
these r fantastic!
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Thankyou so much for your comment
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Deep passions expressed.
Deep passions expressed here. Were you potraying a lover/ patner who still lives with the patner but is out of sync with him/her.
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Maybe, I'm not sure, I wrote what I thought, It could be taken any kind of way to be honest.
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