With steely memories I hold fast to you
reminiscing your touch in venerable loss
placing me on your pedestal of wonder
as I became vain and arrogant in rocky resolve.
Too late now, your essence exhausted
on the stage of your devotion I teased and pranced
in petrified whispers you warned of shallow spirit
now I can only grasp onto recollections of bygone times.
Tears of regret fossilised behind closed lids
bled in anguish for what should have been
now living in this world of granite
never to feel your tender touch so true.
Belatedly I comprehend the genuine trust you had
you were the rock, my portal to forever
the one who's gift was hope in me
the first to bestow faith in a soul almost lost.
To your memory justice will be resolved
crawling across mountains of boulders to show
your devotion to me was not in vain
within my heart you are the foundation of my tomorrows.
Author notes
Art Work: Something To Believe In
By David Ho
In a list
A contest entry
- Picture Prompt Quickie by Touchof1der.
525 points, ended October 13, 2007, 14 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Tears of regret fossilised behind closed lids
bled in anguish for what should have been
now living in this world of granite
never to feel your tender touch so true.
(this is my favorite part)
The whole poem is awesome tho
But that is just my favorite.
To your memory justice will be resolved
crawling across mountains of boulders to show
your devotion to me was not in vain
within my heart you are the foundation of my tomorrows.
(this is my second favorite part)
But this poem is awesome
BRAVO!!!!
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Thanks so much for reading and your wonderfully detailed comments. They are very mush appreciated
gaylene
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This is absolutely breathtaking, and the emotional infusion within the lines is undeniable. You have done an admirable job of bringing out so much meaning with the words you have carefully chosen here. This is also quite thought provoking and very sharp in terms of its images and interpretations. I did note that in line three... you have 'yout'. I think perhaps you meant 'your'.
It's a great piece and I enjoyed reading it. Thank you for taking the time to enter my contest and good luck!
♥ Touchof1der -
wow this is amazing and so wonderfully dne
its full of emotion and imagery
well done and best of luck gran
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