STOP IT!
Stop using that look through those eyes
With those thoughts
Inside your mind!
NO DON'T!
Smile that way, through those teeth
With those sexy lips
And mischievous dimples!
WHY IS IT ME!
That ends up here...
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In the layers between spaces
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Just be honest...
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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Really interresting.
I really like this. It is so simple yet captures the feelings so explicitly. I can relate to it in that it is exactly what I want to say when I am talking to one my ex-wife. She still holds my heart even though we split over non-sense.
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who is this about
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I would agree with Satanic-Faery on the ferocious, outspoken nature of your piece, it is as if that character is unleashing his/her inner emotions, particularly with the use of caps. Yet there is also a sense of ambiguity with the vague imagery, I suppose you are trying to create allusions here, or is it a cover for something very emotional?
By the way, you seem to have frequent the same themes?
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An interesting piece that speaks ferociously. I love it, and to me it seems to be about a person, who someone... likes and is teasing them s in they can't have them? Im not sure but I like this poem heaps and I love the way of moves.... great work
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