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Pieces Of Time




Rubbing my memory raw,
fingers trace
pieces of time
etched in lines
that adorn my face.
Each corridor
of my mind, laced
in pretty ribbons, proper
so no one knows.




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"sifting through the hour glass"

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  • BeautifulFlame
    October 13, 2007
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    This was very interesting!
    Well done !


  • Cerulean Sunrise gold member
    October 13, 2007
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    I love that last line.
    Well done.
    Best of wishes


  • PerfectImperfection
    October 13, 2007
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    Great take on the prompt chosen! Thank you for your entry!


  • shuvi
    October 13, 2007

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    hard-hitting words... GREAT write!
    pieces of time
    etched in lines
    that adorn my face.
    EXCELLENT!
    love and cheers, shuvi