dissolved into mist,
vapour, haze
staring back in the mirror
no longer my face
i held my life,
then let it pass
in my endeavour to attain
the perfect hourglass
A contest entry
- Quickie! ~Paying It Forward~ - Just Because I Can!!!! by PerfectImperfection.
600 points, ended October 13, 2007, 8 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Anorexia is one thing I never have to worry about. You know, cept when I was too into drugs. Not that I'm fat or anything... most of the time. Sorry, I have a bad habit of using humor (sick humor too) to lighten something up. I hate facing serious issues. Try entering this again next time your on, you'd have a chance in the contest if you could get in.
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Perfect!! I seriously love how you rhyme~ so natural it is! The last lines are great~
~KK
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You have written such a beautiful piece about such a sad topic. You have created a masterpiece with this, for in so few lines you have said it all.
An excellent piece.
Gaylene
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beautiful, beautiful imagery...just perfect!!!
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awesome take on prompt
best of luck
Tasha
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Tis was really great!
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Nice take on the prompt. Thank you so much for your entry!
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WOw. That was gooddd. D: heh heh.
write on.
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good luck.
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this is just great. Thanks for sharing it.
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So intense this is. A great write for the prompt.
jewels
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