Where among the mists shall I
find the dreams that passed me by?
Was then the lady
she bid me see
through hope’s reflected light:
How planets rise
and time stands still
the waves forget to fall;
then chance to journey
far distant lands
set my soul to try,
I said to her
please walk with me
to where the world awaits.
You hold my heart
now take my hand
beyond your borders fly.
But she bid me go
begged me not to grieve
for the mists of Avalon.
Where among the mists shall I
find the tears for love I've cried?
In a list
A contest entry
- Pimp up my picture inspired poetry by leander.
400 points, ended January 31, 2008, 46 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - AVALON by maa.
1443 points, ended August 10, 2008, 15 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - November Rounds by CitrineSunrise.
700 points, ended November 12, 2008, 16 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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The Mists of Avalon is an enduring image that lends itself so well to your poetic touch. The opening line catches the reader's attention, drawing us into the shadow world where dreams are sought. I felt the second stanza was a little awkward, but overall a very effective piece. I know you will enjoy the next round. Peace, Liz
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a truly haunting and touching verse that speaks to me of the nostalgia of the "lost home" of our soul that once dwelled in the dimension of timelessness, free from the challenges of worldly duality ...
I also sense a sort of longing for union of the masculine forces of action with the mystical feminine energies that represent intuition and inner guidance ...
a very graceful verse that resonates within the soul ...
words of gentleness that remind us of our own need to merge opposite energy-streams and to find a state of balance and peace ...
thank you so much for this precious entry in my contest,
maa
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lovely piece you have penned,
very touching and vibrant
Beautiful
God bless...
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There is a lot of emotion in this piece, and I really like the pace you have captured in this.
A mystical picture that is, but a very beautiful one
Thank you for entering the contest!
Leander -
Ken you have no idea how you have grabbed me with this piece. The moment your lips uttered the word Avalon you had me hook line and sinker. Oh how I know Avalon well and deeply personal too. I love the emotions captured here. Let no one ever say your words do not captivate and grip for it would surely be a lie. Stunning! Absolutely stunning!
Blessings
Bel
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I am really glad this hit home; Avalon is dear to me and the moment I saw that Image I knew where I was heading.
And, I am proud you feel I have done them both justice.
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Oh this one is being bookmarked. It has found a place among my favorites
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ooh my this made me want to cry the emotions held within are very touching, sigh.. Tearz loving every bit of this.
Love and Light your way
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thank you kindly for the read and the comment
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Beautiful
Ahhh, dear elusive Avalon, just beyond the mists, where questions are answered with a question, in images reflected.
And what remains of the captured soul, is the journey to return, and find that place to better be.
This is a soft portrayal that gently touches Arthurian legend with grace and wonder. I loved this piece dear one.
As always, your verse needs no image to hold its beauty. Wonderful work as always. ~Pamela
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My mind wonders the shores of late in search of plots unfold
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So much depth. I love the: "Where among the mists shall I find that tears for love I've cried?" The choice of wording magnificantly used - both plural [mists and tears] and singular [that tears for love] - beautifying the question with must sadded eloquence. The theme is an 'old' one, but you have presented it as if for the first time. I therefore conclude that a 'collective' experience can never be other than an individual one - no man's pain - how similar - can be like the other. I also have appreciation for: 'and time stand still
the waves forget to fall;' - this is good, no wonder the awards you have lined up. Oh, and while the 'picture' is beautiful - this peom even more, can can do without it. Frans
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Thank you, fransB.
you are correct, the story is old and well told. I am glad you caught that; and well told for the reason that we all need our isles of salvation but cannot linger so long as to forget to live. thanks for reading
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I guess you were saving up creative energy to write something amazing. The picture just lights up the whole entire write, emphasizing the beautiful yet sad essence of it all.
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well really I have been writing non stop for days; just not poetry. but I am glad you liked the
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ohh watcha been writing?
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