Oh God
you do cry quietly while enduring in me
I sensed it by the tear drops of my eyes
though,I had no reason to mourn
still,I located tears in my eyes making me to suppose
that it must be you agonizing
I don't know what is the reason for your crying
but somehow I feel impeachable for all this ache of yours
as it is me who never watchful to know
that how can I make you feel complaisant
precisely when you exist in me
Oh God...
Author notes
Based on a picture...
http://allpoetry.com/contest/2373378
A contest entry
- Picture Prompt Quickie by Touchof1der.
525 points, ended October 13, 2007, 14 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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This poem has different meanings to us... for me, when we are not right with God, he "mourns" within us.. An analytical piece. Great work.
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I like the way you have looked into the image and made it deeply personal. You did a wonderful job here. You have managed to pull me into your thoughts with your well chosen words and have carefully pulled me along with each beautifully flowing line. Nicely done. Thank you for taking the time to enter my contest and good luck!
♥ Touchof1der -
God crying, and you feel responsible? Oh my! You never stop coming up with entirely new aspects of spirituaality. Who is to be parised - you, or the One who fills your soul with such unique expressions? I feel lucky to have read this in themroning. Thanks, and best regards for the contest!
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now i understand
and i to have felt like this my friend
it is sad to feel this way
as each day we strive to become the best we can be
i will pray for your peace as you do for me/ loved this poem and you
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A lovely piece...
A lovely piece; the lines "I don't know what is the reason for your crying, but somehow I feel impeachable for all this ache of yours" really capture the essence of this poem; a marveleously conceived poem. --Joe
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