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Ashes to Ashes

Blackened dreams -

  turn to hardened memories,

     for the night is no longer lit.

  Tears - seem to freeze in the heat

of the desperation within sorrowful weeps.

 

Emptied souls crave fulfillment.

 

The winds are ever forcing reminders

   that the shoulders are bare without the arms

      of a lover’s kiss, or the caress of his heart;

         Eternity ended before longing lips could part.

 

Words unspoken linger in thick air.

 

Time’s hand too quickly moved,

   for it will stop for no man.

 

 

                                        

                                                One is left biting a tongue

                                  heavy with all the right words to say;

           yet the other listens carefully with deaf ears.

Author notes

Love is the spoken as well as the unspoken... never bite your tongue... tommorrow may be too late. Thanks for the inspiration of this contest.



Art Work: Something To Believe In

By David Ho



A contest entry

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  • Great Cthulhu
    March 15, 2008

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    Whoa!

    The last line just really smashes it home, well done write. Love is indeed, precious and requires constant care. Communication, that's the key. Thank you for entering this powerful reminder.


  • Amana Araya Jabari
    October 25, 2007
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    Wow That is really good. Amd I love the pic it's perfect. Where did you find it?


  • poetryality silver member
    October 21, 2007

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    I often think before I speak. Guess I'm from the school of what comes up comes out. There are times I wish I could have grabbed the words and put them back in my mouth. My business partner has this on her voice mail;

    "Make sure you words are always a bit sweetened, just in case you have to eat them." LOL It is good to say what we feel, when we feel it, if those words do not cause pain.

    I love the feel of this poem. It has a Zen affect. The abstract form makes it grab the reader. This line leaped from the page into my psyche;

    "Emptied souls crave fulfillment."

    Congratulations on the honorable Mention. Excellent musing. The graphic art was sure to bring about the best.


    Much Love & Many Blessings ♥


    Mom


  • apoeticinjustice gold member
    October 20, 2007

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    awesome write! Reminds me of my favorite song...If Tomorrow Never Comes, by Garth Brooks. A very enjoyable read. Well done.
    Rory


  • Kari gold member
    October 19, 2007

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    Wow, congrats on your honorable mention. This was so totally incredible and the form was beautiful. You did a great job!


  • jcat gold member
    October 18, 2007

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    Words unspoken linger in thick air..... So often when we hold back what we really want to say it causes more pain and despair than if we had just not bitten our tongue or listened with deaf ears. This is a very beautifully written poem.. Thank you!


  • Touchof1der silver member
    October 13, 2007

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    I think all too often there are times when we just have to bite the bullet and speak our mind. And leave biting the tomgue to another time. This is a beautifully inspiring piece. I thought the format was most fitting the lines contained therein. Soft and sweet your pen spills its ink to create such a fine poem to inhale. Thank you for taking the time to enter my contest and good luck!
    ♥ Touchof1der


  • Frozentearz
    October 13, 2007

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    This has much to say through your words Mel,
    I think the emotion held within it will long linger in
    the minds of the reader long after it is read,
    Thanks for sharing,
    Love and Light
    Frozentearz


  • Endeavor gold member
    October 13, 2007

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    Excellent


    The winds are ever forcing reminders
    that the shoulders are bare without the arms
    of a lover’s kiss, or the caress of his heart;
    Eternity ended before longing lips could part.

    Your skill showes well in this verse


    Beautiful and sad

    Rick

    • luckynsincere
      October 13, 2007
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      RICK!! Thanks so much for stopping in to grace me with your beautiful comment. I truly appreciate that I hope all is will with you

      Mel


  • Ithica silver member
    October 12, 2007

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    When you wait for that RIGHT moment, it will never come along. You may be able to delude yourself otherwise but if something needs to be said and one bites their tongue, by the time it IS said the power of raw honesty is lost It will become tainted by time and so seem calculated. Then fall on deafened ears. I love that picture, I saw it earlier today. You've penned a brilliant poem from your inspiration... Ithica

    • luckynsincere
      October 12, 2007
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      Well thank you... actually every since I read your poem about the words unspoken, the thoughts of this were on my mind... different meaning... but same concept..lol. I saw this pic, and I really had to write, or I would have burst!!

      lol.

      Thank you so much for your words. They are appreciated!

      Mel


  • Moons Lunar Angel
    October 12, 2007

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    Wow This is so touching. The sadness in each line just sucks the reader in, as if it were them. So so sad But true.
    Lil

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