I am becoming half the person
so I will be twice the woman
I want to be
Yet - saying goodbye is difficult
The callous penetrating concrete
hurts to the touch
tear stains are burrowed
deep into drawn
unyielding face lines
I know the pain
of your soul -
why your lips are taut
and eyes are sealed
You have carried
your burden
almost alone
I forgive you
and set you free
No more -
I stand here, naked
letting go
finally true to myself
saying goodbye
Author notes
Art Work: Something To Believe In
By David Ho
A contest entry
- Picture Prompt Quickie by Touchof1der.
525 points, ended October 13, 2007, 14 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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Thank you for the comments to my poem
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So sad
Glad you are better.
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You've come a long way since then... It was less a goodbye and more of a hello...
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A beautiful write. You've coalesced with the picture wonderfully. Excellent write. We often lose who we are and fighting to get ourself back is a hard thing to do.
Sam
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Strong
Your first stanza is a paradox, but you go on to explain it. We often take roles that end up painful and untrue, and then we must change. Change is painful too, but it offers hope. This is strong and full of emotion, well done and congratulations for the trophy.
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gorgeous
wut an intense piece...the photo, the words, the feelings, all of it - very powerful -
Your poem started with a very strong stanza, and it got even better!
Sad thoughts, yet with a huge measure of hope and self awareness.
Very good poem Cheryl, glad to see you posting again
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It just occured to me how easy it is to become complacent in life and how difficult it is change. Recent events have forced me to meet the same challenges you've detailed here. Congratulations on the bronze.
Sincerely,
Leo Long
ps. It is good to read your work again.
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How often have we said to others " the first move is always the hardest, from then on it gets easier" You have taken the first steps and have crossed the frozen waste...now things can only improve. Many congratulations on this wonderful poem. It touched me deeply.
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First of all. let me say how wonderful it is to see the ink flowing from your pen again. You have been missed dear Lady. Secondly, to come back with such a strong voice that speaks volumes on the human spirit letting go, making a proclamation to be true to self and to extend a hand in forgiveness so that you too can move onward in your own journeys is just powerful stuff. The things that make my heart rejoice and bring a smile to my lips. Thank you for taking the time to enter my contest and good luck to you!
♥ Touchof1der -
how i wish i could say these cherished words of affirmation to my own heart, my own soul and feel the freedom of 'being' Your poem echoes so much of my condition of mind right now as i struggle to find balance, to find some kind of level ground. I am not sure where you are in your own journey but this seems like a very positive statement you've made.
blessings and best wishes,
~r.
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Cheryl, this is very deep and I just love this. I've missed your voice around here. Good to see you back.
~Lyrical
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