Do you lose your identity
In the caustic waves
Of the well endowed?
A belly-full of the
Insipid dreamer?
A face in the crowd?
Let them be,
Evil Hindrances
To your progress
In life
It is amusing
Where they find
Their pleasures
In strife
You are the pillar of strength
To make it this far
Just one more step to be past
All the pain...and the scars
Author notes
Written October 7th, 2003
A contest entry
- October New Members- "Chin Up" Poetry Contest - Hosted by The AllPoetry Greeter Staff by CookieZeal.
300 points, ended November 3, 2003, 22 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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This is an inspiring write, and one step at a time is how many people must live, the only way that they can survive! Excellent poem...Welco
me to AP and GOOD LUCK!!! -
Bravo, well done, a truly inspireing peice,
good luck in the contest,
peace be with & blessed be;
shaggy wolf
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Well, I guess I'd recommend going with what feels right. I only said what I'd do in the same situation- and each of us is a different poet.
Good luck though. -
effin' A!
it's great!
I love the certainty & authority it speaks with... -
Dilemma: Ok, that's two in favor, and one against the capitalizati
ons...oh my...should they stay or should they go??? -
Powerful and profound - thank you for entering - good luck
Von -
Excellent! I love the alliteration
s, phonetics, and the way you capitalized the words. Normally, it would look forced, but they are very well used.
Welcome to the best place on the net for improving your work!
Good poem..thank you for your entry!!!!!!!
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I like the fact you have higlighted the words of significance
, it helps people to really get the message, it also looks different and makes you go Oh WOW I see what they mean throughout each stanza
Welcome to AP
and Good luck
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Nicely done, although I don't think you need to capitalise the words. We know what we're looking for, and it takes a little away from the piece as a whole by breaking it up.
Just a suggestion, good luck in the contest. -
i liked the simple way this tries to lift the spirit.
good luck in the contest.
best to you
WSD -
Truly inspiring write
Powerful and uplifting message
Take care,
Karen
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