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Him and Her Part 2: The End of a Love Story.....(or is it?)

He turned around, feeling hopeless;

He walked along the edge, where just yesterday they had been together;

He smelled the air and remembered her;

He sat down where they had just been together, and wept;

She kept her eyes out the window, remembering yesterday, the fun she had with him;

She kept staring behind to see if this was really happening;

Her mother turned around and glared at her;

All her mother said was "I don't know why you're so caught up with this boy, you barely know each-other, besides, my new job will bring in more money, and this way you can meet another boy";

She replied to her "You don't know why I'm so 'caught up' with that boy? Mother, do you even remember what you and Dad felt when you first met? Do you even care how I fell about that boy";

Her mother stared at her blankly;

"Mother, stop the car." She demanded;

The tires screeched to a stop at the side of the road;

The girl opened her door, got out of the car, and started walking the opposite way;

Her mother turned around and rolled down her window;

"Where are you going" her mother asked her;

"To that boy" she mocked her mother;

"By yourself, where will you stay, what will you wear?" her mother questioned her;

"I will stay with that boy, I will wear what I have packed and hid, and I will not be alone, I will be with that boy" she grinned pleasantly;

Her mother was furious;

"Mother, I will call every night and tell you what I did that day, and that boys parents will call you and tell you how misbehaved I've been";

With that her mother drove the opposite direction, and she started to run the way her heart told her to;

She ran and ran, she suddenly heard the slapping of the waves on the sandy shore;

She ran even faster, hoping he was still there;

She stopped, out of breath;

Her chest pounded from her running several miles;

She stops and sits on the ground, only for a moment;

She gets up, still breathing heavily, and runs toward the sound of the waves;

She feels sand brush her feet, she knows she is there;

She runs into the waves, needing to feel that this is really happening;

She swims and flows with the water, feeling as thought they have become one massive body;

She treads water, trying to see the shore, but she can't;

She swims toward where she thinks the shore is;

She sees the sandy beach, and swims underwater to the sand;

She floats on her back as the waves push onto the sand;

Suddenly the waves pull her back into the ocean;

She gets drug underwater;

She yells out help when she reaches the surface, hoping someone will hear her;

She hears a big splash more toward the shore, hopeing that it was a person, she yells out help again;

She blacks out;

He swims as fast as he can, hearing someone yell help, he swims as fast as he can;

He sees someones hand and dives underwater, closing his eyes;

He grabs the body, it's almost motionless;

He swims as fast as he can to the shore, trying to avoid the waves;

He just stares at the shore, not even looking at who he had grabbed;

He reached the shore, he recognizes the person;

He slowly breathes into her, and checks for pulse;

He does this several more times;

"One one-thousand, two one-thousand, three one-thousand";

Suddenly she coughs, water squirts out of her mouth;

She looks at him, he at her;

She sits up and says "You saved my life," and with that she embraced him;

He embraced her;

She explained what had happened with her mother;

He said that he thinks his folks wouldn't mind her staying for a while;

With that she sat closely next to him;

She held his hand, he held hers;

She was happy to be with that boy;

She kissed him, thankful that this was not their last day together;

They stood up, and started to run along the beach;

Maybe there is a hapy ending to this story.

 

 

TO BE CONTINUED....................................

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  • wow i cant believe her mom let her go, my mom sooo wouldnt lol
    good job

  • WOW! thats amazingly good! so cute too
    wanna send me a link to the 3?


  • Hope Angel silver member
    July 24

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    Sissy you are a good story teller but...
    I have to say this is slightly unrealistic. I doubt any mother would just let her daughter run away like that.
    But I'm not trying to say that this is bad, maybe I'm just to realistic.

    Do they get names later?

    I love you

  • amazingly written! I absolutely love it! I enjoyed reading this. it's amazing how love can make you do things you normally wouldn't do... (such as standing up to your parents, for example) Keep up your amazing work! I'mma go read the next one... maybe not right now, I'm I'mma go read it!

    TwiztidMaggot

    • Thank you, I'm glad that I found one more reader !
      And, if you would, please pass on "Him and Her" to some of your favorites, or if you know someone who would enjoy this series who is on here, then please give them the link to Part 1, I would greatly appreciate getting even more readers.

      Thanks again for continuing to read,
      ~Annie Shadows


  • Captain Jenny
    April 6, 2008
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    This is so awesome. It's like a poem and a story lol


  • Nephlim
    December 22, 2007

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    Aww not sure where you're going to go with this, but hopefully in the end they'll be together
    GREAT job
    diggin it majorly

  • MasteroftheCruciatus
    December 19, 2007

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    awesome

    I like it. It's not so much a poem as it is a story, but, after all, all a poem is is a way to express emotions and ideas. You were very clear and concise and it certainly was an exciting read.


  • warrior-eagle
    December 8, 2007

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    Awww
    You've got me hooked
    AND am not one that gets hooked on romance writes Hehe,
    very great write,
    you are really good at this Hehe.

    ..Simply Me♥

    P.S On to part 3,
    part 3 here i go!


  • Falling.Again...Xx
    November 27, 2007
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    OMG!! You keep us wanting more, its amazing how you come up with these great themes. Keep it up!


  • Astral Flare
    November 26, 2007

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    This was a great poem, once again full of emotion and intense. Just watch the punctuation Wonderful write.


  • And Hyetal
    November 25, 2007

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    Hooray for the girl!

    I'm glad that they got back together... I can't wait to read what happens in the third part!

    Always,
    Cassie


  • storiesuntold gold member
    October 21, 2007

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    So sad

    What if he hadnt seen her Oh I do hope it has a happy ending though I really do but in real life so often it isnt so happy


  • abrknme
    October 17, 2007

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    Excellent

    I really liked these stories. They are so beautiful. I loved them both. I can't wait for the other one.


  • Maybe.I.Am.Broken.
    October 12, 2007
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    Third part!

    The third part's title will be called "A Trilogy to a Happy Ending" hope y'all enjoy this!

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