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Upward

Clinging
Heavy burdens weighing
Sighing
Thoughts settle from swirling
Determined
Grasp hold of a mighty second wind
Upward
Not alone, I struggle forth with God

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  • GaryCGibson
    October 12, 2007

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    I liked this one quite a lot. The uh, prosody has cadence progressing to the meaning of the poem. Rests amidst the work; climbing as the lines descend. Qualitatitvely aesthetic even as a verisimilitude of a westernized haiku.


  • ApostolicChild
    October 12, 2007
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    I like this poem. You used simplicity to help the reader understand what's going on. Good job!