You've been about for eighty years
Laughed a lot and shed some tears
You've been a child, a nurse, a wife
Mother, Grandma, what a life!
You've lived through peace, and through a war.
A lot to fill your years, four score.
I've not yet known you fifty years
I too have laughed and cried some tears
You've made me dinners, quite a few
I've rarely given thanks to you.
My brothers and sister loved as well
And other things I shall not tell!
You helped us grow to what we are
We've done OK, not travelled far
Now we have children of our own
And some of those are fully grown
Time keeps passing. Years go by
They haven't thought to tell us why.
You taught me how to bake a cake,
You picked me up from each mistake,
You accepted all my worst ideas,
You help me fight my craven fears.
You may have faults, but only some
Overall
I love you Mum!
Author notes
A work in progress
A contest entry
- Entertain Me by EmeraldDaze.
600 points, ended November 6, 2007, 44 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Love Notes To Your Mom by midnight eyes.
500 points, ended January 10, 2008, 13 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please comment below. Spelling or rhyming or scanning corrections welcome.
Comments
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Awww...Definitely should be on a Halmark card or something, very sweet. This is a good poem, though ou let your rhyme sceme slip in the last stanza.
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In what way has the rhyme scheme slipped?
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I am afraid I would not be qualified to critique this poem technically but I would like to say the rhyming flowed beautifully and the subject matter obviously held deeply in your heart. A mother is many things to many people but to read of the love shared between mother and son is special. I very much enjoyed this. Bravo
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