Submission
Let the corners of my mind
Show you how love can bind
Mental bondage is so divine
Your submission makes you mine
Trust my actions my precious one
This journey of ours has just begun
With this knife upon your butt cheek
Your submission carved into your physique
Together we shall learn and grow
Like the river that swirls and flows
Learning the restrains of self control
Your submission of body mind and soul
Your body’s canvas for my creative pleasure
To peg, pet and play with at my own leisure
Let go of your self consciousness and doubt
Your submission takes over as you fade out
D/s is more than barking orders for fun
It loving, caring, devotion and then some
Even through the joys of pleasure, play and pain
My Dominance, through trust is earned, never strained
In a list
A contest entry
- PIF - Quickie - Adult by Dragonsong.
525 points, ended October 30, 2007, 10 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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ABSOLUTELY WONDERFUL!
As a sub to a wonderful Master this is electric in what it stirs... both the imagery and the emotion! Thank you!
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STUNNING!!!
STUNNING WRITING, THIS IS WONDERFUL I LOVED IT. I HAVE GOT TO SAY THAT THE FLOW OF THIS PIECE WAS QUITE OUTSTANDING. I LOVE THE WAY YOU DROPPED WORDS TO FORM OTHERS.
THEY MOLDED TOGETHER SO WELL TO FORM THE RHYME AND RHYTHM. WONDERFUL EROTIC PIECE OF WRITING MY SISTER. ONE OF THE BEST YOU HAVE DONE SO FAR.
MUCH LOVE TO YOU MY SISTER
YOUR BROTHER
WAYNE LEON
xxx
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Mental bondage is so devine .....MAN, thats a good line (among others, of course). Another great poem! :-)
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thank you for your comment
ang
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smiles.. so nice to see someone who truly has an understanding of D/s in it's purest form.. to relinquish control, and trust to the point of enjoying and begging for knife play is an experience not many can relate to, but for those who have been there it is truly special.
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Giggles, thank you for your comment Dins. all i did was present what was requested, at heart im still pretty submissive and aim to please.
ang
P.s i see you enjoyed it so much you commented twice
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smiles.. so nice to see someone who truly has an understanding of D/s in it's purest form.. to relinquish control, and trust to the point of enjoying and begging for knife play is an experience not many can relate to, but for those who have been there it is truly special.
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I remember
That's it...now I remember what D/s is about. Not the groveling and pretense that everyone seems to think it is!
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LOL, yeah somewhere along the way we remember what it means to us and present it in a different form
ang
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I really enjoyed this, the first line of the last stanza really stood out to me. Unfortunatly many people get into the scene because of just that.
Great poem here.
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thank you for stopping by and reading this. I tried to describe one simple aspect of a D/s relationship as simply as possible, the caring and loving that goes with it. it is sad that ppl wont get into the scene or look into it based on one line, but perhaps it will get 1 person to view the scene in a different light. (im rambling on here)
anyway, thanks for reading and commenting, it is greatly appreciated.
ang
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This is a very well written piece, I absolutely love what this represents...
a love that knows no boundries and the deepest trust between a Dom and sub..
Good luck in the contest.
**Master Ktulu**
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thank you so much for your wonderful comment Ktulu, it is truly appreciated. *smiles & curtsies*
ang
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wow that is a beautiful peace offering a love that is strong and sure... well done
cheers
Jen
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thank you for reading and commenting on my work, it is greatly appreciated.
ang
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Brilliantly written, you are certainly mastering the use of rhyme, it flows beautifully and none of it seems forced.
Love the line : "More than barking orders for fun"
Hopefully this will give insight to others that D/s is not about orders it is about giving
Well done, good luck in the contest
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