In my heart our words entwine
holding your soft hands in mine
such passion from worlds apart
could never more immerse my heart.
Passion in your eyes sight unseen
coruscate in sunset tangerines
meld heated horizons of you and I
melting dewdrops in morning sunrise.
Dribbling beads from velvet petals
where in my soul your liquid settles.
Author notes
picture prompt
I like it because it is salacious sensual and suggestive
In a list
A contest entry
- PIF Quickie 10 - 12 - 45 Contest -- GOLD PIF's by Stardust-luvr.
700 points, ended October 14, 2007, 10 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Pre-write Quickie- Hurry by StormGoddess.
450 points, ended January 18, 31 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - LOVE IS IN THE AIR.......LET YOUR LOVE HEART SHINE! BIG POINTS!!!!! by ears2hearyou.
1200 points, ended April 11, 19 entries
Honorable winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Your Best Poems by Blooming Poet.
360 points, ended May 14, 11 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - anything & prewites by whos my humblepie.
600 points, ended July 20, 49 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - SHOW ME YOUR BEST...Anything Goes by nevadapoet.
900 points, ends September 10, 78 entries
• next poem in this contest, • Add to finalists list, or remove from contest
Comments
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What a beautiful write, a great entry for this contest. A perfectly penned write with great flow and good imagery. Thank you for the entry. Keep the pen flowing...the pleasure was all mine.
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Short
Yet ever so sweet and very heart felt. Gorgeous form, i've got to say.
Lovely write indeed.
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This is so romantic... I wish I could feel his arms around me, comforting me and showing that he can be a lovely guy really and he never meant to hurt me. Beautifully said.
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beautiful...
so many images...all beautiful and heart warming.
keep sharing your gift.
HENSLEY
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I am in awe. I do not know what to say.you have penned a masterpiece here. This is the kind of love we all want. great work
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My goodness this is perfection
the imagery and structure was a great lesson to us all!
Well done, well done!
The imagery was beautiful and dream like.
This is a magnificent poem!
ears/Seattle BRAVO! BRAVO!
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This was really really sweet, and so beautiful.. I really enjoyed...
Great write..
Peace to you, Jetleena
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Great write. Quick question can you tell me what "coruscate" means?
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Very nicly written.... I agree with some of the other commentors... the use of the petals throughout the poem made it so much more romantic, whick made it so much better.
Thank you so much for entering my contest and good luck.
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I thought this was really beautiful. I loved the way you ended the poem, with the use of petals, it makes it so delicate and sweet. This was really romantic.
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oh, i really enjoied this poem, thanks!
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This is a very beautiful write.
I could feel the love in every line. I also enjoyed the creativity in this. The images are very touching.
Thank you for entering and good luck.
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Wow!
This is so amazing! Congratulations on the two gold trophies with this one!!! It deserved them! It is so beautifully written with so much love and emotion! It so powerful for being so short! You really did a great job with the picture prompt, I am impressed!
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lovely
lovely write . . liked "In my heart our worlds entwine" and "melting dewdrops in morning sunrise" . . congrats on the trophies . . well done !
. Rewarded 4
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this is good, very descriptive, colorful, and metaphoric. i wouldnt change anything about this! god bless!
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Great write
Great write, short,simple, and sweet.
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love the photo!
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no wonder you have two golds!!!! thi sis simply breathtaking!!!!
GBY
SilverButterfly
(Mary)
. Rewarded 4
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I'm speechless, a great write. well done.
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Such feelings of emotion in a brief write. The rhyme and the flow gives testment to your talent. Of course it is three for you.
. Rewarded 4
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Beautiful!!
Dribbling beads from velvet petals
where in my soul your liquid settles.
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wonderful. absolutly wonderful. you pain a nice picture with your words. keep up the great work!
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nice poem...............
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Congrats on both of the gold trophies. The title automatically got my attention so I figured I'd give this a read and ... I was NOT disappointed. I LOVED it! The rhyming, the imagery and word choice... everything was just fabulous. Thank you so much for this read. I think it deserves a better picture though.
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Very touching and sweet. Great write
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Truly, truly beautiful this is!
Awesomely stunning piece of poetry!
More than worthy of the two golds!
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Beautiful Memories, Beautiful Write!
Third time at congratulating you on the second Gold on this one, dearest brother.The shimmer of it corruscates as a star. And the memories of this lovely poem, go deep and far into a bond of love understood, that mutually was for a time for the others good...and remains solid as now sister and brother, forever loyal to each other.....Never forgotten this precious gem of a poem..and appreciated with love....Hope you take this poem to its' limits.....Beautiful as always!Sorry I can't vote again! -
"coruscate in sunset tangerines" - just one line of so many beatifully crafted words. Admiration has no bounds for this delightful piece.
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Wow hun two Golds !!!!!!!!!!!!!
I am so proud of you!
I already commented but this deserves a second one!
Brillent softness...
Love
lil
sis always
~Lisa~
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brilliant piece... well worthy of the gold. i particularly love the last two lines,
hugs,
georgie,
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Very Beautiful
What a beautiful sensual written poem. Congradulations on 2 gold trophy's. Liquid Petal is such a beautiful soft title. Then on the first line In my heart our words entwine. This is real nice for communication with romance, is always wonderful for a woman. Then the last line, Dribbling beads from velvet petal where in my soul your liquid settles. Wow I felt very romanced with your poem here. Thank you for sharing your gift to write such lovely poetry.
Blessings
Kelle Marie
stavykm
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Holy wow! This is utterly beautiful. The words are so passionate and filled with such deep love. The imagery is mesmerizing and the whole piece, stunning. Thank you for entering and good luck. Storm
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Great!!
Passion in your eyes sight unseen
coruscate in sunset tangerines.......
Such a beautiful statement you have made for you see the heart and soul, not the skin.
Dribbling beads from velvet petals
where in my soul your liquid settles
.....This line is the best of all, is the climax of this poem and expresses such lovely imagery of the liquid of velvet petals...A wonderful expression.
I see why you have won the gold for this romantic poem.
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P.S. Congratulations on your Gold trophy...as your sister, I wanted to say it ! Wonderful !!So proud of you dear brother! Rose Angel
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Poetry In Motion
My my my, what beautiful words, and so thought provoking.
You should be writing books...at least that's my say on the subject.
Meld On my friend ....Meld On
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Well look at you with that shiny trophy!
this was beautiful!
A ver tender write my friend and brother,
Love
~Lisa~
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Loves' images....Beautiful!
What a gentle scene,and what gentle words of love,as if your voice is speaking"such passion from worlds apart could never more immerse my heart" Passion in your eyes sight unseen.coruscate in sunrise tangerines
meld heated horizons of you and I, melting dewdrops in morning sunrise, dribbling beads from velvet petals where in my soul your liquid settles" It is so beautiful most had to be retyped. Such an aura of beauty, love, as if nature in her beauty is showing what twos' love and one's words are doing for the other, ministering to the soul in passionate love....Such wonderful pictures of love seen here...Truly beautiful! A precious oneness of two souls as one.
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Checking dictionary 'coruscate'
Waiting for the little man in the last carriage
till I am back to abnormality to comment appropriately
Loved this one and will be back to check on you soon!
Her from Downunder
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The softness in this poem catches my breath, the romance make me yearn, you have penned something quite beautiful here, and I look forward to reading more.
Cathy
♥♥♥♥
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So Beautiful and Romantic
I love your poem, what a romantic you are and I hope you win the contest. The title Liquid Petals is perfect for this poem and the first line in my heart my words entwine and that picture oh my goes so perfect with this poem and than your last line Where in my soul your liquid settles. Excellent write as always. I feel wonderful, a write only a poet could say in beautiful words of expression and from the heart! Kelle Marie, stavykm
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the true and complete essense of love and passion is ignited in your inspiring words of beauty. The eyes and the heart say soooo much in unspoken messages of true love enveloped in each others souls. well done and many blessings always xxx
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This is really a pretty write.Thank you for sharing this with me goodluck to you in the contest.Best wishes and much love
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You encapture heart felt words like a fine gold threads of love in all its beauty tenderness and passion. The desires of lust comforted by fluid motion of the flow between two hearts. From the title you hold my attention as the words support the picture prompt I leave with the lingering thoughts of love. I feel you have won more than the gold of a contest.
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