The pale pink lips part,
softly, ever so softly embracing mine.
like the softest velvet,
and yet tinges of electricity run through me.
Everything melts away,
all the ice of this world,
my problems and troubles,
aches and bothers,
Everything fades
and all that is left is
me
and
her.
No more pain,
only softness, warmth...
Her warm lips part and run over mine,
and I'm lost forever in her eyes.
She smiles her blushey smile,
and turns away as I call her beautiful,
thouroughly embarassed.
Then she leans over to me,
looking deeply into my eyes with her twin pools of moon,
to my soul,
and says I love you.
Better moments than this there never were.
Author notes
Recalling a moment from the other day, still checking to make sure it really happened.
A contest entry
- How Does It Feel? by Trellis.
475 points, ended October 21, 2007, 5 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Remind Me of the One I Love by Dlvvanzor.
1200 points, ended October 16, 2007, 20 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Too unstructured? I'm trying something new.
Comments
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I love you, Mr. Pants! Thank you so much!!! It's so pretty and full of imagery. *bats eyelashes* Mesa wuvvle woo!!! 
Always,
Cassie
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A lovely depiction of the delicate feel of love. Thank you for your entry.
Cris
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Aww that was sweet. And so innocent! Great write.
Thanks for entering!
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Ewwwwwww! jk I like the last line b/c it reminds me of something out a Romeo and Juliet, not sure why. Though not my thing, ( ) I really like this poem and it was very nicely thought out and put together. I'm really happy for you guys.
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Not my best, not all that good, but meh, I can't change it now.
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If you would like to make changes, please feel free to do so. I am only taking quick peeks as the entries come in. I will not be going over them closely until the contest is over.
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cool!
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