Empty.
The shopping cart
is pushed around,
yet it holds nothing.
Empty.
The boy pushes
his faithful cart,
yet his stomach
still remains
abandoned.
Empty.
The cart brings back
memories from
only God knows
how long ago
Memories of when
he and the shopping cart
weren't so
Empty.
Abandoned.
Alone.
Author notes
Not so sure about this one...
A contest entry
- Blank Cheque by sca.
777 points, ended November 1, 2007, 48 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - increase the peace [or something along those lines] by Sofia Nadia.
1050 points, ended November 25, 2007, 24 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What did you think?
Comments
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great write. Good luck in the contest.
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I actually really like this. The words flow and the rhyme just sits perfectly. It's also an original metaphor - abandonment of a child likened to abandonment of a shopping cart, both in a previous life filled to the brim with food and goodies, and pushed forward by the parent? (Correct me where I'm wrong ).
=> Jess
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I'm glad you liked this one, and you were exactly on with the metaphor.
Thank you for commenting!
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ok. so now i get it once it's typed up! it is really good. kinda a show not tell too. you never even said po erty although your poem had th word "written" all over it. really good. sorry i couldn't read it before.
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woot, sweet poem. so sad! best poem about poverty I've read in a while, though. great job, enjoy the cheerios!!
lise
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I'm so glad you liked it! I was inspired by the picture on our core lit. book. lol. Thanks for the comment and applause!
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which book is it, homecoming? i went to a seventh graders house last year and read it, isn't it about homeless kids? and you're welcome for the cheerios.
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Aww..
That was really touching! It's catches my attention...it's really sad.
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My god... I love this... it hits me where it counts. I agree with TXCowgirl, it sounds like a poverty write, but whether it is or it isn't, its very very well written.
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I'm glad you liked it! Thank you for the applause.
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You're very welcome, I'd give you more but it won't let me in this reply to your comment. ^_^;; lol
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I feel that this could almost be about all of the poverty that we see and all of the children that go hungry every night because there parents don't have the means to keep food in the house. I felt this was quite a powerfully written poem.
~TXCowgirl
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