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Paaaarrrrrtay

Paaaarrrrrtay, she’d say, and do her little bangers ball shimmy.
I had a crush on my moms best friend.
They were all such adorable trash, except my momma, a’course.
Such sweet little sex kittens, such gracious little groupies.
I was too young at the time, not even pondering puberty,
But I knew then, as we know always.
That laying your head in a beautiful womans lap ain’t all bad.
She’d play with my hair, in her barrette and brazier, and I had a view.
Of this womans fertility, of my confusion.
In a yellow mustang on a Saturday night.
They’d paaarrrrrtay, and I’d play into it.
But remembering back, everyone got laid that night (every night)
Except me.  How surprising and disturbing.

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Written October 7th, 2003

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  • Katilina
    October 22, 2003
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    ll i really loved it, modern, funny, and completely true...see how it trickles down the generations...bitter sweet


  • October 19, 2003
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    Wow, this is really cool. Can't say I relate to any aspect of it, but I still really like this. Great job, keep it up honey~honey!
    ~Jessica~
    dangerous-angel
    The Chatterbox Ghost

  • Morning Rain
    October 7, 2003
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    thumbs up!

    Young mama, huh? Good story, good view. Again, a nice piece of writing.


  • October 7, 2003
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    "and I had a view.
    Of this womans fertility, of my confusion."

    ah yes.. this did hit a cord with me quite a bit.. I've always pondered what is so special about a girls lap.. and it is right there. But I never thought to write about it. too nervous? I dunno...

    Your last part.. about the laid part.. again, that hit another cord lol.. everyone got laid.. i'm just a messed up person. Oh well.

    Music is your god, listen well.
    ~ Jack Hertz


  • October 7, 2003
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    mmm~
    This made me smile~
    Though I was raised in a convent~
    So there was no paaarrrrtay~
    I could actualy picture this in my mind~
    A nice write~
    ~Smiles~Emma


  • namaste
    October 7, 2003
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    humm partying parents?? i had a crush on my dads best friend ..no hes my best friend too..nice write

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