A forlorn soul of twenty-three
Packed up his life and took to the sea.
No lass or lady had fancied him.
His downcast, shifty eyes were dim.
To live without had been his call,
There was so little to enthrall.
He boozed one night out on the deck
While the ship was sailing past a wreck.
A sound he heard which plucked his heart,
Then sundered it, ripped it apart.
His common sense was lost and gone
When down he dove to the siren's song.
Over the rail the sot dove without pause,
To join with this caller, his only cause.
Into the bay filled with dangerous reef,
A sunken ship graveyard littered with grief.
Down there in the weeds he thought he could spy
A woman in green from the corner of his eye.
Aye, she beckoned him forth, a lass so fair.
She sang to his soul while twirling her hair.
Nothing else mattered but this lust to him
So further he pressed this deadly last swim.
On reaching his love, she embraced him tight.
Not that she needed to. He wouldn't fight.
The sweet kiss was his first, only, and last.
A sad life he'd lived in his lonely past.
Inhaling her breath, in brine he did drown.
With painless passion, she drank his soul down.
Author notes
http://www.greenwichworkshop.com/catalogue/june04/images/pirateMermaid.jpg
Don't take this personally, but, “ARRR! Shanghai the booty on the poop deck!”
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This is a well penned piece and fits the picture perfectly. You have captured the sirens song well and the lore surrounding her damaging singing to the ships and sailors near her lilting voice. This flows so well that it ended before I knew and I just had to reread it again. Excellent piece and good luck in the contest
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That poem was absolutely perfect for the picture your chose! I could have swore this was writtenjust for the picture itself! I loved the rhyme and flow of the piece. And the story you told is captivating and poignant to say the least. I absolutely loved this! It has a very different feel than most that have been entered so far
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Thanks much! Always glad to entertain. Just noticed that I'd forgotten to shanghai the booty on the poopdeck, and corrected that. You do realize how that sounds, aye?! lol
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Ah, sirens...
You crafted quite a nice poem! I love the rhyme and rhythm scheme, well done. You covered one of my favorite horror themes. Thanks for entering! -
I love it~I particularly loved the last stanza....I wonder if this says anything about me? (laughing) this was a great write~
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Every time I read this,
I want to go jump on a sloop and blast you the hell out of your cabin, when your asleep of course! Cause your guns be bigger. ahahahahaaaahahahhahahhahhahh
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awesome
I absolutly love this. Such a great write. Goes right in my favorites.
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This was nearly titled "The Kelpie's Kiss".
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YIKES! Talk about being loved to death!
Your imagery is stunning! And the flow is smooth and graceful. The words just glide off the tongue, allowing the scene to float smoothly from one act to another. Very nicely penned! Thank you for sharing and best wishes to you in the contest. Keep that quill handy dear poet! 
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Are you sure they didn't love him up and turn him into a toad? Just kidding! this was really good! Those evil sirens and the power they have over men. Homer must have had some of the experiences with women that I have when he wrote the Oddysey.
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WOW. This was very well written.
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