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My Way

Welcome...
to my world.
Where life's not full of birds and bees
unicorns and mysteries.
But,
Damp dark clouds and rainy days,
thick black smoke and misty haze.
Fear,
is lodged inside my head
and the sickening sense of dread.
Hope
is death and death is dreams.
If only death was what it seems.
A chance
to start again from scratch,
erase the scars take off the patch
that
make the memories come alive,
even after years they still survive.
Fight
I must to release the pain
but i have no energy to fight again.
Pain
is the answer, pain is the cure,
slit my wrists till I can't feel anymore.
Curl
in a ball and cut till I cry.
Let the wounds bleed, let them bleed till I die.
It's
my final option, my only hope.
Without it I know that I will not cope
with
the world all around me that thinks that I'm fine
with the life I've been given- I'm afraid I decline.

Author notes

Thanks for reading. I would be greatful for any suggestions or improvements. Everything I write comes from the heart and is just how i feel.

Option 1. title promp- All alone again

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  • nobodys-girl
    January 15

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    wow...this is just amazing...seriously i just loved reading it. thank you so much for entering my contest and best of luck.


  • C J Weatherholt
    November 18, 2007

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    Great Poem over all not so sure about the rhyme. Some of it seems forced. Love the lines. " Hope is death and death is dreams. If only death was what it seems." My only perference would be to replace what with as. I like the feeling I get from this poem. It's an amazing write and believe it or not I felt this way at one point in time. It will eat you alive until you find out what is the sole root of your pain. After that it takes a long time but you can dig yourself out of that whole that so many burried you under. Thank you again for entering my contest this was amazing!


  • xToxicxCupcakesx
    November 7, 2007
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    Omgosh! I loooooooooove this! It's great!

  • luvdrkchocolate
    October 14, 2007

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    Oh. This is a very sad poem that you have going on in here. It does sound like you have written it from the heart. It always makes me sad when I read about people cutting themselves because it means that they haven't found someone that they can talk to and that can explain that when you hit your teens and have hormones, those hormones make all your feelings stronger even your sad ones. So you have to remember that it isn't as bad as you feel right now, it's partly your hormones fault. And if you just hang on and find things to do like writing poetry or drawing or joining groups, then you'll feel better. I hope that you feel better soon!


  • GradiusArmon
    October 11, 2007

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    Good first poem!

    I'm suprised, most people's first poems are really crappy. Your was well written and really good. Like the topic part where you saw like fight and then talk about it. Only this is, the poem overall is good length, but I felt you could have written more per topic. But then again what do I know. Haha.

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