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Season of Change

 

walking this leafy pathway, I revel in the glory of fall

I love my neighborhood with its tree lined streets

stopping, I lean against one to glance up at the leaves

waving against a sky, quivering from gentle caresses

I imagine the wind going through my hair is him

running his fingers through the silken strands he loved

oddly, I once thought he loved many things about me
glancing at my wrists, I'm thankful they bear no marks,

if longing worked wonders, there would be scars there

I nearly fell apart after he hit me that first time.

Thinking back to hours I spent on the bathroom floor,

daring myself to commit the ultimate sacrifice.

Suffice to say, I didn't do it and for that I'm glad

there are so many things that life has to offer

 

looking at the leaves as they dangle above me

then to the piles that surround my feet, I smile

thinking to myself that even if I live to be 100

I'll only witness this miraculous change 100 times

how sad it is when I think of it in that way

I love autumn. It's a sacred time for me.

Resuming my walk, I kick at the leaves

watching them land in piles of assorted color.

Spotting a recent neatly raked pile of leaves,

I fall backwards overcome with fits of laughter

as the sky tumbles and I land, covered in leaves

standing rather abruptly, so as not to be seen,

I brush the leaves off and resume my walk home

I glance at the beauty around me and once again

the pain subsides as I swirl a leaf by its stem and 

I’m overcome with a fresh resolve to make it.

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  • Spiritual Nature
    October 11, 2007

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    ASTOUNDINGLY BEAUTIFUL, POWERFUL AND POIGNANT! You are an amazing writer. You paint and whisper your craft unto the paper and I am thrilled to have shared in it. Thank you. Blessing, D.


  • TXCowgirl
    October 11, 2007

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    This is truly a beautiful poem. I love the ability to bring your words to life and wrap themselves around the reader and their hearts. You have me longing for Autumn. And I must agree that when you break it down like you did with if you live to be a 100 you'll only see Autumn a 100 times, it is quite sad. I like the positive resolve that you made at the end. I felt that was the perfect way to end this poem. Best wishes to you dear poet in your contest.
    ~TXCowgirl


  • Midnight Lace
    October 11, 2007
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    I love the quality of your poetry. I like how you allowed the reader into a rather personal area of your life. I enjoyed how you mentioned something that rather sad happening to you, you resolved to make the best out of it. The picture and words blend with such perfection it leaves me in awe. I wish you the best of luck in the contest.
    Smoochie