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My Aphrodisiac

I never even knew her name
Yet everyday I longed to know
Who was this creature of beauty?
My love for her would only grow

In the quaint little cafe- I waited
Not knowing would she arrive
Then when she did float in,
I would suddenly feel alive

She was my aphrodisiac
I longed to feel her lips
To run my fingers through her hair
To forever watch the swishing of her hips

I waited for a year
Then she was gone- I nolonger had the the tie
As I pondered with tears in my eyes, I asked myself
What stirs the stagnant mind to say goodbye?








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(ii) What stirs the stagnant mind to say goodbye?

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  • Slipper
    October 13, 2007

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    G'day mate. I'm Slip.

    You took it hard mate, but fair crack of the whip, it takes only a good night's sleep to get over a Sheilah leavin' ya. I wouldn't wait a year. Girls is rare where I come from. Seize the day, as Mrs J. tells me, your not getting any younger. Third line from the bottom, you really had the hots because you stuttered. I feel for you, mate, fair dinkum. But, crikey, don't break up because of a Sheilah who wiggles!
    Hooroo, Slip.


  • Anna Emkah
    October 13, 2007

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    Nicely done.

    A very nice approach to the title 'What stirs the stagnant mind to say goodbye?' I like romantic poems and this one is beautiful. If I were you I would read the poem out loud once, then you will notice that the flow is not 100% right. Also there are a few typing errors (I nolonger had the the tie). Not that it minds, but being a perfectionist myself... All in all: nicely done. Anna.