I am praising you dear God,
I love you with all my heart.
Even though you took my sister,
and our hearts broke apart.
Thank you for all the blessings,
you give to me every day.
Even though you took my sister,
to Heaven so far away.
Thank you for always keeping me safe,
from all the bad things around.
Even though you took my sister,
letting her body fall to the ground.
You are so very wonderful,
I praise your Holy Name.
Even though you took my sister,
and things will never be the same.
I love singing songs to you,
with others or when I'm alone.
Even though you took my sister,
your comfort I have known .
I love you so much dear God,
I know that you still love me.
Even though you took my sister,
and you took a part of me
Author notes
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I wrote this from the eyes of my 7 year old niece who lost her 10 year old sister.
Written October 7th, 2003
In a list
A contest entry
- Ok, this is one with some broad topics here...... by Made2GlorifyHim.
250 points, ended October 18, 2003, 23 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What did you think
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Excellent!
Oh Sam, only a child could have such a giving and forgiving spirit.
I love the innocence displayed in this tender poem. I still get teary eyed thinking of how God took my little brother and I was 25 and found it hard to forgive the Lord at that time. This is an excellent example of a child's heart. Great entry!!! Good Luck!
Much Love my sister,
Renee
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Wow thas a very sweet melody..ode.
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sad story though
i m so sorry...givemy regards to your niece as well
i cannot imagine what she is goin through
i m so sorry...
PEN ON
~sToNeDMEMORY
http://stonedmemory.tripod.com
I loved this:
"I love singing songs to you,
with others or when I'm alone.
Even though you took my sister,
your comfort I have known .
I love you so much dear God,
I know that you still love me.
Even though you took my sister,
and you took a part of me"
i love God too but i dont think i would if he took my sister away from me.... -
Thank you made2glorify
him
I wrote this and wanted those repeating words....theyoung girl is praising the Lord Even though....
Edited on Oct 08, 8:37 because ''. -
omg i love this! great job! If you had added in one more line of Even though you took my sister then it would have qualified for my last contest and you would have def. placed with that one!
it's a great poem, and it's very inspirational. It's always interesting to see how different people react to death.... through this poem you showed that death can't stop you from praising God, and Christ, Our Saviour.
suggestions tho... at this part:
I love to sing songs to you,
with others or when I'm alone.
Even though you took my sister,
I sing to you on my own.
I think you should change it so it's:
I love to sing songs to you,
with others or when I'm alone.
Even though you took my sister,
I still bow down at your throne.
cause you've already said that you sing when you're with someone or not, so why add in the next line or two that you sing to him on your own?
my other suggestion is that you break it up into stanzas so thats its easier to read. it'll flow smoother that way. Maybe breaking it up into stanzas according to the Even though... line? like have that one at the beginning of each stanza? just a suggestion...
great poem! I enjoyed reading it very very much! And thank you for entering!
As Always,
Made to Glorify HIM,
Amie -
Wow! Great poem! I liked reading this one... I must say though, that I think you might have said the "even though you took my sister" part waaay too many times... Six times is a lot for such a short poem! Maybe cut it out a couple of times, or change it to not be the exact same wording... Like not the same "even though..." wording.... Ya know what I mean? Great poem, and I'm glad someone else entered this contest! They're some great topics, I hope Made2 gets more entries soon!!
Best of luck ~ WahrZuMir22 aka *Britt*
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