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I've fallen

Its when I feel like I can't go on,
that I need you the most.

When everything is falling,
And I'm exposed.
Like a deer caught in headlights.

I can only stare at my demise in all its beauty
As it pummells toward me.

I'll write these words like they are a solution.
But nothing can help me.
I doubt anyone can help me.

I've fallen.
Fallen far this time.


I don't think I can find the way out.

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  • Georgia La Mariposa
    October 15, 2007
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    As usual your poems evoked something in me, you have a beautiful way with words and this poem sets the imagery of the Music Video Bring Me To Life by Evanescence if you have seen it. If not she is walking on window ledges and eventually she falls, once again a wonderful write Hope you get a chance to read my work sometime as we share the same darkness xxxxxxx