We marched through this town
called Bullingen today,
sweet Joseph and Mary
is this place a mess,
thank God, it’s cold enough
to keep the smell of the dead
down some, poor bastards.
I hate that foul, rotten
meat odor.
Wish I had something to give
to the children, always there
in every town, waiting
as we come through,
hands out,
it’s them that I really
feel sorry for, with their
lifeless eyes and
their faces, those gaunt
pale little faces.
Sarge says our next mission’s
a real wiz-bang deal,
something big, it’s always big
to the sergeants and officers,
every skirmish, every battle,
every bullet fired, and I am
so damn tired~
In a list
A contest entry
- Bullingen 4Km ~ war image contest by ariosto.
1000 points, ended October 26, 2007, 10 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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The exasperated tired voice seeps through. The thoughts of wanting to help the children seems spot on, something that even military training couldn't wipe away. I find this to be raw and real.
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History
I like this piece. Especially being a big reader of WW2, Sadly seems the young only learn about it thru the movies & then very little at that.
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A nice upfront quality of being there.
You carry us along with your story so well.
I think this would also work in a different form as a prose poem.
Thanks for entering!
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Excellent
Your words leave very impressive, though disturbing, images and thoughts. My favourite lines:
"it’s them that I really
feel sorry for, with their
lifeless eyes and
their faces, those gaunt
pale little faces"
Congrats, dear friend, and best regards for the contest.
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MJ...it seems you and I took a different stance on the photo, yet, together our poems do tell a single story...This is so well written from a soldier's point of view. I wish you well in the contest, my friend. Love, Lane
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aww so sad, but so wonderful.
~Michaela~
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oh my! I have nothing to say to this really ...
*sniff*
excellent sad write - well done!
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Great job of pulling us into this place and time. We should always remember the loss and sacrifice from war.
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