Lovely girl filled up with innocence
can you breathe a little longer for this shot
Could you dance a little faster
While we inscribe all your apologies
On the paper stained with everything your not
So etch words into your canvas
Light up their eyes with just one look
Fake is in dear, just like their lies and sinful looks
Can you pose a little straighter
Now point your skull closer to the gun
So we can paint in red his strategy
To finish this mess you have begun
Calm yourself my pretty picture
You must not shatter your decor
Inhaling fire like the paper
You keep hidden beneath you bed
just in case you push down to far
Beautiful face done up so lovely
Little figure on your walls
The perfect image being crafted by your will
Don't hold it down the want you small, so small
You've got lying down to basics
With that cigarette smoke burning your eyes
And you've got hiding down to science
maybe if you wasted away in front of them
Maybe then they could see your disguise
So tonight stay up with your covers masking the partial truth
And a letter covering the place where ink blotted out your heart
The truth is your ripping under all that paste
Holding you together so they don't see
The broken and cheated girl hidden behind that face
So tomorrow you can dance a little faster
And smile at the naive filled adoration of the crowd
You are a prisoner to the almighty master
Made up faces, kisses and lies
beg mercy daring for the pulpit sings
Smile on artificial, smile, hate and die
Author notes
also random.
A contest entry
- Somehow [Everythings] Going To Fall. {Darling We're Not Giving Up} by SarahEatsAirplane.
800 points, ended December 4, 2007, 22 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - DIRTY PRETTY.... NOW OPEN TO PREWRITES by mysticstorm.
475 points, ended October 24, 2007, 8 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Spindles Of Chaos Weaving Lies That She Died With On Her Lips. by LucyLightning.
300 points, ended November 2, 2007, 20 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Beautiful Dirty Pretty Poetry by Carpe Noctem.
525 points, ended January 3, 2008, 15 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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This was beautiful. I loved your choice of words, and so many phrases stood out to me. Great job! Thanks for entering, and best of luck!
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This is such a WONDERFUL poem. Good job!
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Wonderfully done! A beautiful example of dirty/pretty...so lovely yet so sad. The ending is excellent, for the fake smiles and mask we hide behind can not last forever...yet we always try for one more day. Still seeking love and acceptance from those we love.
Perfectly done.
Thank you for entering!
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very good
I don't really understand the (mechanics?) of Dirty Pretty..but I do appreciate good poetry..this is good and on the dark side which I like..sunshine and roses only go so far.. really boring..you know?..this is so much more interesting..excellent write and good luck in the contest..
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Wow.. this is dirty pretty to the MAX!
AKA... I LOVE IT.
wow you just blew me away with the beauty of this..
Its amazing how you used all those metaphors, and what is really weird is that I didn't know what I was reading while I read it, but then everything came together at the end, it was lovely!.
great job!
ContagiousXAccident
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