Is this relationship real?
or an idea constructed in the depths of my imagination.
Conceived in a time of loneliness,
born in a state of sorrow.
Things that seem right now,
are often wrong later...
But to stop things here
would mean we'll never know
what this is, or what it could have been.
Will we ever know if happiness
lies just below the surface,
of this thing we think is love?
As I lay here in your arms
and feel the warmth upon my skin
these emotions start to grow
from the depths of my soul
and I wish I had the words
to tell you how you make me feel,
but my mind has been high-jacked
by the irrational concept of romance,
it de-rails my thought.
My ability to form reason
is slowly disassembled by desire
as I try to stay cautious of the emotion
that affects me in your presence.
I would like to hear your interpretation
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well it's no big suprise sis that from reading this, i'm once again full of so much thought. I really like the way you express your feelings, thoughts and emotions through your words, but by doing this your asking so many questions which allow you to go in depth with it. It's been a long time, love sucks but it doesn't at times. I guess take a chance while you have it, it might be the best thing you ever do or the worst otherwise you'll just end up regretting what might have been??? Love your work, but thats no suprise who wouldnt??/
love ya xoxoxoxo
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Amazing piece of writing my friend you really can paint a picture for the reader with your words.
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A very nice an thought out write. I don't know, I'm rather confused by the whole thing... Interpretation? Well, it seems that your heart and mind are conflicted over your love for someone or somethin... I'd figure it's someone due to you mentioning being in their arms and feeling their warmth... However that could refer to something... Like a blanket or drug or who knows what. Then there is the mention of romance making me almost positive it's a person, but still a little hesitant. Now, that's pretty much where I got lost. So, if it is someone you're conflicted over find a way to make your mind and heart agree... On what? They'll have to decide. One suggestion though, maybe try shortening it a bit, you know, find ways to say the same thing with fewer words. And last but not least, In the fifteenth line I think you meant "emotions". Just a typo, I get them all the time too. Anyway, I rather enjoyed reading this and thinking over it. Thank you so much for sharing your words,thoughts, and experiences with all of us here. -
I liked reading this piece, it's nice to know that I'm not the only one confused on love. It is hard to tell if it's for real or not. And being in love and loving can actually be two different things. The simplisity of the write shows the depth of the thought put into this. Being in love is fun, loving someone can be hard though.
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amazing
i can really relate to this its amazing the words you used discribed so much of how i feel this is very good -
all around good poem. the only problem i see is in line 15, you said "emations" instead of "emotions". all in all still a very good read.
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thanks heaps for pointing out the typo for me
Falon
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