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Afternoon Nap.




afternoon nap
under my pillow
a child's giggles














Andrew Hide

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  • Emerald13
    October 12, 2007
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    delightful ...

    subsequent reads and i still struggle with 'under' ... i know where you mean, i just cant get out from 'under' the pillow ... (for me it means coverd by/pinned down) beneath ... below ... below ? ... dont know .. perhaps i am being toooo nitty ...

    it is a delightful moment, well observed >>> Gina


  • maggiejamespoet silver member
    October 11, 2007

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    Wonderful haiku that evokes scenes of children playing and pretending to be asleep, all visualized from one excellent haiku! Love it!

  • Billbard silver member
    October 10, 2007

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    Excellent

    Andrew.Could not happen to me at age ninety three(your age reversed).My daughter is in her sixties and cackles rather than giggle.


  • azure85 gold member
    October 10, 2007

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    This is cute-you try to nap, but the kids are having too much fun. This is a good haiku, I love the sound of the "giggles."