Like no other affection,
Young love leaves you breathless,
Embarrassed, awkward, afraid.
Occasionally you are nervous to say hello,
Sometimes frightened to wave goodbye.
You love their every expression,
When they sob, smile, scowl-
Though these fill you with hatred
At the same time,
For this adoration leaves
You vulnerable.
In absolute awe.
Or quite possibly,
This susceptability makes it easier
For your angel to pry open
The gates to your soul,
And to feel accepted by doing so,
while you may find acceptance in return.
With time on your side,
And all the world before you,
This sense of security,
This fantasy-fiction
Is a new form of reality.
A beautiful change from
The lonely world around you.
This savior can make you feel gorgeous
As though the sun only shines for you,
Granting they are the light
In your stormy weather,
Reflecting the rain in your mind
To produce glorious rainbows.
Pessimism to optimism.
The finest times of your life.
A contest entry
- Today is that day.... by LadyLeviathan.
450 points, ended October 15, 2007, 16 entries
Silver trophy winner
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This is quite a wonderous piece. I think it sums up young love quite nicely. You really captured the feelings that I think most people go through when falling in love when they are young... Though I'm not saying that that doesn't happen when you are older either.
Good job, good luck, and keep up the great writing!
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I like how you depicted teen romance; well crushes.
" Like no other affection,
Young love leaves you breathless,
Embarrassed, awkward, afraid."
oh so true -
Thank you for your entry. I like the ambivalence in this piece.
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amazing write
thanks for sharing...good luck -
wow this poem is good.... i enjoyed reading it....
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haha. love the ending. very simple n sweet.
'For your angel to pry open
The gates to your soul'
lovin it. -
Granting they are the light
In your stormy weather,
Reflecting the rain in your mind
To produce glorious rainbows.
wow...for your first love poem this blew me away! you did such a wonderful job on this and i give you a standing ovation!!! bravo!
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