I close my eyes
and embrace the world around me.
I open my senses
and listen to life's orchestra.
My soul is lifted
as the music overcomes me.
With my fantasy,
we take to the dance floor.
Step by step
our hearts are intertwined.
tied by the song of life,
and conducted by destiny.
The ballroom echoes of our steps,
as we leave our mark in time.
We glide through our dreams
forever in sync.
Together as one.
We will conquer the dance floor.
Lead by fate,
and dipped by temptation.
My heart will stay true to the beat
as long as I have you.
Dancing forever in my arms.
Author notes
I was inspired by some classical music I was listening to and this is what became of it. Hope you enjoy it.
Please tell me what you think
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this
makes me want to cry....sorry im upset and this reminds me of good times....
great poem all in all...it is beautiful...~the sad farewell.....
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I loved the way that you used a snapshot in time to portay your love for this girl, the moment when you are dancing! It also has a very nice loose rhyme scheme which adds to the poem. Also, you have managed to keep a beat and a rythym in the poem like you would have in the music! Beatiful write, i have recently written one for my girlfriend too, she appreciated mine, and im sure your girlfriend will love this beautiful peice of heartfelt poetry!
Axe
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amazing
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this is great. i can totally picture it in my mind. love the metaphors and descriptive language. it makes me happy when guys can write like this
nice job
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this is a very beautiful piece here. i enjoyed reading it. i also liked the part.... "Together as one.
We will conquer the dance floor.
Lead by fate,
and dipped by temptation.
My heart will stay true to the beat
as long as I have you.
Dancing forever in my arms."
very sweet.
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awwwww. this is for a girl you say? that's sweet. she should love it! and if she doesn't...that's not very nice/sensitive/intelligent of her. it's a great poem.
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All i know is this is beautiful! I've read it 6 times now. And i can't stop reading it.
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Wow! I most definitely like this poem. It's wonderful! My favorite line is, "We glide through our dreams forever in sync." There's a lot of imagery in this poem. I love it! Good work! I hope to read more of your poetry.
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