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My Fault

I cried myself
to sleep last night.
It happened as soon
as I went to bed,
turned out the light.
I dreamt my
nightmare again.
The day you died,
my lifes end.
Lieing there,
tears rolling
down my cheeks.
I can't stop sobbing,
I feel so weak.
The flames
getting bigger,
engulfing the house.
Not many other ways
to handle it,
so I just
cry it out.
The fire men said
it was too dangerous,
there's no way of
getting out alive.
I wish it were me in
your place,
I'd rather go
through the pain,
I'd rather've died.
Your screams
will always haunt me,
the memories scard
in my mind.
I know I
could have
done something,
if only there was
courage to find.
Now,
because
of me,
you're gone.

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  • Charley-
    January 15, 2008

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    great

    Thanks for commenting on my poem in your contest i wanted to return a favor for you.I'm sorry for your loss i know how that goes too well. But if this helps you in anyway death comes and goes it's never really anyone's fault it's a way life.It's god way of saying it's time for that person to go. I think that's why i wrote I wish cause as many times you wish the bad doesn't happen it continues to happen like a un-controllable virus. Anyway sorry just wanted to say that. I think your poem was great thanks for sharing.


    • JustFallingApart
      January 15, 2008
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      well thanks, im sorry you can relate to my pain, a way of life, i haven't thought of it like that even though it's true it hadn't realy dawned on me until i read what you wrote, thank you, very much for commenting on my work


  • l o v e b u r s t
    November 4, 2007

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    shannon it is not ur fault he died..so dont think that ok..u didnt kno..mann all ur new poems are sad..b happy damnt! lol jk

    • JustFallingApart
      November 4, 2007
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      lol it's hard, partialy cause of my dopemien imbalance, partialy cause life sucks ass..... but i can't help but blame myself..... i wish i had done somethin


  • TheLostGirl
    October 18, 2007

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    I really like this poem. I understand the feeling that you have when someone dies you feel like a piece is missing it sucks this is a great write

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