While breakings mature one
Through tough times you grow
But it just makes me harder
It stagnants my flow.
-If i would pull away from you
I bet you'd let me go
But they've turned me into an atom
And you can't break me anymore.
Author notes
tried too often, lost too often.
A contest entry
- 15 lines or less... by xTomorrowx.
450 points, ended October 26, 2007, 20 entries
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Please tell me what you think
Comments
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While the first stanza was a bit unclear to me, the second one came like a slap in the face, ha-ha! I liked it very, very much!! This is exactly the way I feel NOW. I feel like an atom. All powerful and unbreakable. And this is exactly what your poem captures! Great!
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i like it, it's really well written, it's hard when you try but then you just lose despite all your effort...
i love "But they've turned me into and atom/And you can't break me anymore." i love that bit.
really awesome write, thanks for entering and good luck! =)
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