like melted ice
nothing ever lasts
it may seem slow at first
slowly slipping out of your grasp
leaking through your fingers for the tighter you hold
the less you have to control
The more you try and just hold on
The more it melts and soon is gone
leaving your hand empty and cold
and you longing for another ice to hold
A contest entry
- 15 lines or less... by xTomorrowx.
450 points, ended October 26, 2007, 20 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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very true, nicely put.
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excellent
The imagery is great. I really like this one.
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Love the cold feeling of this poem.
It seems that it happened to me just a minute ago.
Were did u get all thes good or sould I say great lovely writeing of Ice cubes Well have to tell u can u make a poem about your best friend have to say bye like a Ice cube~dances~ good poet that is why I did dances!!!
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love the feel of this, life is like an ice cube, start with a drop of water, become something that we can hold on to, but it doesn't matter how hard you try to hold on to it when the time come, we have to say good bye, just like melting ice.
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Very n-ICE indeed. LOL Good job. I like how you tied the ice and "nothing" together.
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wow...
great meaning in this...
i love it! it's just brilliant! =)
thanks heaps for entering and good luck! =)
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