Its a strange feeling when you KnOw
that [nothing is the same.]
The same eyes {that loved me}
The same voice {that soothed me}
The same lips {that kissed me}
Have disappeared...
this pen is my W E A P O N
so
B
E
W
A
R
E
[nothing is the same]
I turn on the television...
Dirty Dancing
and I can't watch it because of YOU
it is my f a v o r i t e movie and yet
I cry with just the thought
of singing "Time of My Life" or "She's Like the Wind"
simply because your hand
isn't m.i.n.e to hold
a
n
y
m
o
r
e
[nothing is the same]
I can't listen to my favorite song
the one {that played in the car}
when you kissed me {with PASSION}
{{for the very first time}}
and i felt the L>O>V>E>
in your breath, in your lips
as they melted into mine
and sensed the URGENCY in your touch
but
[nothing is the same]
Author notes
I used a few lines from the band "A Perfect Circle" *whom i love!*
as well as *Its a strange feeling when you know that [nothing is the same.]*
Good Luck with your contest!
*Poetryistherapy
Please tell me what you think
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It is a little bit repetative but I think I got the gist.
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It's the style of poetry. It's called Dirty Pretty, and this is my interpretation.
Thank you for the feedback.
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hi, daughter, dear! haven't talked to you in awhile.
so big hugs for you. 
have a great weekend!! ~~Mom~~
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So sad
Loss is hard for any reason and when you are reminded of it it comes back even stronger. Songs and things are triggers for those memories, but time will fade those as well. I know it may not seem like it now, but take it from an old man...they do slowly go away! This is a very good write and the form lends to the mixed up feelings portrayed. the Shaker
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Good use of the style, I love every part of it! You are amazing, AP sis! Good repetition of [nothing is the same]. Everything is very powerful and moving, although, of course, I can't relate to it (I'm eleven, lol!). I honestly can't say why you didn't win something in either contest, but oh well. Good luck in future writings!
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Well Done
“Every thing gets better with time”; and “If it doesn’t break you it will surely make you stronger.” Clichés but they are very much true. I hope you’ve moved on with your life. You are very talented, continue to write such beautiful poetry. God Bless
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WOW. I loved this. haha, I just might have to comment on all of your poems ;] I especially loved how this was such a personal piece. Incredible. I can perfectly relate to:
-I turn on the television...
Dirty Dancing
and I can't watch it because of YOU
...
Well, it wasn't exactly Dirty Dancing, but I know there are a lottt of things I can't watch or songs I can't listen to because of a guy from the past. You penned that perfectly. I also loved the repetition of [nothing is the same]
Amazinggg. Love it♥
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I thought you would enjoy some of my own poems... it seems like we have a kindred spirit in writing... stupid relationships. lol.
I'm grateful for the comment, and that you liked it.
Thank you.
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enjoyable to read. takees a person back to their own moments of remembrance.
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wow. this piece is simply amazing. i caught myself crying while i was reading this on multiple occaisions. this poem reminds me of all the good times that i had with my fiancee before she was killed. my life has never been the same without her. great write hun, never stop.
Rob -
wow. that's very good. sadly, i've felt that for the past week because my boyfriend broke up with me. i pray God gives you and i the strength to move on, because no matter what, there IS someone out there for you.
God Bless,
~minicooper~ -
very nicely penned, although I don't understand all the parentheses and such. Oh well, it is your style I suppose and I am not a critic or trying to say there is anything wrong with it. I enjoyed the poem, though I felt as if you held back something, that could have made it a little more emotional.It is still good, just not dark and despairing enough to me , but just an opinion.
line 38 should read "they" instead of "the" ...melted into mine -
This has really good content, I like the fact that it is dirty pretty, but you didn't go OVERBOARD on the punc, but you still did use some.
I think that you can continue this and make it longer, I suggest that you do, because it might intrest future readers A LOT.
but then again, you don't have to if you don't want to.
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Wow. Now...this is a creative piece that's so filled with emotion that it's spilling over. Loved how you used brackets, the falling word, and...well, everything. It's all creative. Good job. I wish you luck.
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