the ocean was our floor
and we swept the waves away
like they were
stray, unwanted particles---
dust
with bristly brooms
and the laughter of children
on the blue
Author notes
not sure why ive been using color so much lately.
A contest entry
- 15 lines or less... by xTomorrowx.
450 points, ended October 26, 2007, 20 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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One of the few short pieces which I actually enjoyed.
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nice...
i love poems like this, that show so much in so few words...
it's really good, thanks for entering and good luck! =) -
I love this. Umm I think, the last one which had color was beautiful as well *hint hint*
-Esha
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