It's too late to apologize
now that the pills are kicking in
I'm tired of the pain and lies
I guess you got your wish,your going to win.
you told me you would be there for me
but you lied,when i needed you the most
I guess i shouldn't be mad,your setting me free
so here's to you sweet liar,have a toast.
A toast for letting me realize I'm nothing to you
that I'm just your rag doll when you want to have fun
A toast to showing me what i needed to do
razorblades didn't work and i have no gun.
I don't think i have much time left here
I feel numbness and now i can barely see
with this note I'll give you a single tear
and now i am finally
set
free.
goodbye sweet liar!!!
Author notes
i dont really like guys...love them but do you have to like them?
well one made me feel this way hope you like it!
option #3 letter C
A contest entry
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God i felt like i dropped a massive rock of my back!
This was terrific!
Well done on a surpurb write, this really drew me in and hooked on me!
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Very emo. I love it. I'm a sucker for emo poems. But I'm not biased. So, in effect, very good but kind of forced rhyming
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It brought a new perspective to what men sometimes do. You did a absolutly great job. It sounded a tad forced but over well done. Thank you for entering!
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Excellent Work Thank you for entering my contest I wish you the best of luck
RedwingSpirit
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I like how you put in the pills it's really a great poem!!
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Removing to close this contest. please enter in other contest
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I'm sorry but could you please re enter this poem in a new contest i am holding because of some error made this contest will be shut down a new one will be started same type so don't change the poem please!
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Thanks for your entry and good luck!
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Greatly written poem. I see it as simple and to the point even though it has such a deep message. Once again, good write.
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wow i really like this poem and i can really know where you are coming from. good write.
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oh sad and aa little depressing but yet in the end it's almost like a little victory for breaking free of a bond or something like that!Good Luc
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wow deep, sad, morbid. no one in any sense should put there self worth into the hands of another. Great read none the less, full of emotions and darkness.
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Ahh so sad. A great write with deep emotions. I liked this line razorblades didn't work and i have no gun.
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ha, I can relate XD
I really liked the undertone of this poem, it was dark and somewhat sad T.T
razorblades didn't work and i have no gun.
this line is sweeeet, i really like it
everyone feels like this sometimes, youre always going to get hurt... BLAME MEN
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Wow!! I can totally relate! Great write!! Thank you for entering and good luck in the contest!
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Gahh I was writing a really long comment on this when I managed to click a button on the side of the mouse which takes you back a page so it was lost. So I'm pissed off!
Guys aren't all that bad, I promise! Well...OK...maybe we are.
I like your expression, we love them, doesn't mean we have to like them.
Anyway, about the poem, the content is pretty good, cliched, but you've written it well. The rhyme is good too, the only problem really is the flow. The last two stanzas are pretty fine I think, it's just the first two.
The last line in the first stanza is too long...maybe you could get rid of the "I guess" - that would work. Stanza two also needs some work.
On the second line, I'd get rid of "you" so it reads "but lied" instead of "but you lied". It has the same effect and it flows better (in my opinion).
Next line you could remove the "I guess" again and that will flow. Last line, take away "have" - you don't need it.
Sorry for going on like that.
Anyway, I liked your poem and so do other people it seems, so congratulations on your trophies
Thanks for entering and good luck
x take care x
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A very heartfelt poem. Angry at him so much and it comes though so well. I dont blame you hey. It was good you got this out instead of keeping it inside
DEEP!!
Many thanks and Good Luck
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I like this poem it really expresses that feeling of resentment you sometimes get after a break up that ends bitterly!good work! wisinald
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Congrats! Thanks for your entry! Hope you will join any of my future contests.
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Great poem! I really liked it. It was difficult to read. The colors are good, it's just the font if bigger and different would of made a big difference. Good luck and thanks for entering! I really like this one!
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VERY NICE but it was very hard to read it
i like the flow of the poem
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Great poem
I'm sure most people understand it
Alot have been down that road
Well done
Good luck in my contest
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yes,
i hate the gender we like to call "men"
*rolls eyes*
lol.
=DDD
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Women do it to men to sweetie, lol. It's why I started the contest she entered.
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I know you like to joke around like that, but it can be quite degrading when you put as all down for the actions of a few.
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yeah, i've heard.
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I feel the same as you write, I think were going through the same
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wow, this is amazing. its filled with (hate lust), nice. Thanks so much for entering and good luck
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sweetness i really loved this piece
but it already had a trophy and in the rules no trophys for a poem unless its a honorable meantion than that would be ok....
wonderful tho!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
great job!!!!
Thank you so much for entering this creative work of art into my Contest!!!!!!!
much love and respects!!!
XxLisaJazminexX
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This is a very good piece full of emotion and it held my attention even with the line breaks thanks for sharing
goodluck to you in the contest.
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I really like this background. Did you make it?
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Wow very powerful write and I have just wanted to die from pain myself but believe me pills aren't the answer my son just died at the young age of 24 just 4 weeks ago. And it was a overdose of pills. Three months of sobriety and just 1 day he was gone. My heart is shattered forever as his mom. Ok back to this encreadible poem The title Sweet Liar is perfect than the first line It's to late to apologize and than the last line set free....goodbye sweet liar. Bravo. Thank you for sharing your gift to write poetry with me, Kelle Marie, stavykm
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wow i must not be getting all of my messages because i didnt get this one.im so sorry about you son.
i hope in time you can heal and if you ever need somebody to talk to im here for you mom!!
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I hear you sister, as I know from experience, thank you for your entry, Josephine
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amazing write
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Oh, that was heartbreaking yet beautifully written. I read your author's notes and that's fine. I know what it's like and the answer is NO you don't have to like guys, just gotta love em' lol. Wonderful write, I like it because I can relate as well. Best of luck and thanks for entering
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Beautiful poem I loved it! I know how you feel. *hugs*
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Wow How sad~ It really saddens me to think there are a lot of people who take such drastic measures when they feel like that~ It's a terrific write!
Thanks for entering our Battle of the sex's - Good luck to you ~ I'll be moving finalist up closer to the close of the contest.
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