Touch me through keystrokes distant but mine,
of course I suspect its only a matter of time.
Wonder how long I can go,
without gaining a friend,
or making a foe?
Not through my words, of course,
but I always assume the absolute worst.
'cause the norm for me it seems,
is to hurt those I love;
bearing the pain,
until somebody screams.
I consider you a friend, indeed
assuming too much,
but allowing this need.
Because you are kind,
honest and fair,
I am trying my best,
not to louse up this affair.
So now, in closing,
I just have to say,
that without your guidance,
there were times,
I would have lost my way.
I think of you often,
and when I do,
I rebound my thoughts,
off the atmosphere,
to get them to you.
A contest entry
- Meaningful Personal Connections - points increased! by ellipsist.
3150 points, ended October 24, 2007, 19 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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A very different sort of write from you than what I have become accustom to... A genuine piece of compassion for the one in which you speak. Well penned thoughts of friendship, and endearment. Lovely write.
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I just have to say,
that without your guidance,
there were times,
I would have lost my way.
I think of you often,
and when I do,
I rebound my thoughts,
off the atmosphere,
to get them to you.
Just a few lines I felt that capture the emotion of this piece and left one with the feeling of sublime..
A wonderful write..
Peace
~A~
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WOnderfully written. it is very open honest and heartfelt. I can feel the deep emotional current running throughout the piece. Keep the ink flowing and good luck.
~Donna~
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Thanx. There are easy topics to write about, and friendship, when sincere is the easiest because of heartfelt honesty.
bye for now
ted
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We all are more aware of our sins more than our blessings. In is in the reflections that we see in our friends that we have moment of truth and see what blessings we are in their life. It is not a lie and when we run away from the hurt we truly cause is the betrayal of who we are.
Well written.
Peace & Love, Tom B.
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Yes, true words. Family even more so when the hurt is to them. Sometimes, in trying too hard to be a friend, there is fear of overstepping boundaries and betraying that trust.
Thanx for the bunnies.
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this is a beautiful piece, indeed! kind of light hearted and even a little humorous in places, but also touching and tender and meaningful... thank you for sharing this heartfelt entry in my contest...
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Such touching words, from the heart.
It is amazing the deepfelt connections we can make thru these electronic cables ... but make them we can. Don't worry about past relationships, or future possibilities. Live in the now, be the best person you can be ... be open to friendship and caring. Because in the end, that's all any of us has. And true friends love and care for us, in spite of our imperfections. And the others ... well, they are acquaintances passing by. Wonderful poem! Best of luck in the contest. ...JustBreathe
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I had to click onto this poem because I have one with the same title. It is evident that you love this person, and yes...it is true, we manage somehow to hurt the people we love. I think that's because they are the ones nearest to us, the ones that know us, and have hold high expectations of us. Keep being you, that's the best any of us can be. Don't zoom too far ahead, stay in the moment. Your poem is genuine, sincere, it carries weight in the now. Very nicely penned poet. I wish you the best in the contest.
Much Love ♥
Renee
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Yes, staying centered is so important especially for me because of my past. If I don't, I always hurt those around me. Though I haven't known the person , for whom I wrote this poem about, very long at all, I wanted to convey to them thank you, and my fear of messing up a friendship (though a ridiculous product of my own insecurity). Thanx again for your comments.
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This is beautiful...
If you could see through my eyes, I wonder what you'd be feeling right now. Because I can see you standing as you really are... powerful, sensitive, determined, and gracious. I can see you achieving everything you choose to achieve... being exactly who and what you want to be. Look through my eyes for an instant and you'll see yourself conquering all limitations. Look through my eyes and see who you really are and what you are capable of. You can accomplish anything -- I know you can.
♥ Touchof1der
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Thank you. nuff said !!
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Succinct, and very timely...good luck to you in the contest
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Thank You !!!!!!!!!!
I love that word "succinct" to me it is the highest form of flattery one can receive. Because the definition is :
~~marked by compact precise expression without wasted words ~~
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Yes, it actually is and you deserve itlol
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