cold wind whispers
against the hair on my nape
shivers trace
the length of my spine
ethereal feelings
dance vivid yet silent
faint touch on the palm
overwhelmed by a sense of knowing
sudden realisation you are here
to send the message, it's alright to miss you.
Author notes
Prompt: "a whisper awakened my spirit" and contest image.
A contest entry
- Early Bird Quickiness 10/10 lines/30 min by poet2angels.
475 points, ended October 10, 2007, 5 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Give me your best shot!!! by reymysterio.
425 points, ended May 27, 2008, 12 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Silver to Gold by GypsyEyes.
300 points, ended June 9, 2008, 14 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Detailed critique welcome
Comments
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this is a very haunting poem! great job! thank you so much for entering my contest and i wish you the best of luck! ~CarnalNineTailedFox
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I LIKE YOUR BACKROUND ITS AWESOME AND I LIKE YOUR POEM ITS FANTASTIC WELL DONE
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wow congrats great emotion filled write
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Scott this is haunting and heart breaking! I read it silently, then read it slowly out loud...by the end of the third read there are tears rolling down my face...very "Ghost Whisperer" Love it
Cathy
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thanks dear friend, glad you enjoyed it and ghost whisperer kind of was my inspiration
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Yay!! that makes me feel smart
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well done and congrats on trophy
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how nice, telling the reader of a visitation from a loving spirit or presence, and a message of great importance... so very well done here... PK
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Yes to miss is to love that which calls us deep in shadow...lovely verse
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awww this was so sweetly written.
faint touch on the palm
overwhelmed by a sense of knowing
sudden realisation you are here
to send the message, it's alright to miss you.
Beautiful!
~Lisa~
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omg I love this!
Such a haunting melody for the mind to capture....Sigh....Juust so beautiful...
Lynda
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prompt is:
"a whisper awakened my spirit"
or
the pic above
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