The gloves are off entirely
seperating me from you
cascading shimmering indulgence
bobbling up like malted wine
I've got the grainiest sensation
that I'm losing grip of my mind
Speak to me of yesteryears
when all was fresh and new
I need the quick inspire
the hollowed out casual review
take me along in your journey
gathered in the fold of your arms
give me the swift version mentality
let me dance inside of your charms
Haltingly captivating
you're all I need and beyond
in the crease of my hearts fabric
lies your smile of which I've become fond
Paint of us another picture
it's not too late, it can never be
I've got the only conclusion
in my lap of intense luxury
We are so due for a crusing
sailing a ship into the dawn
better than work on the horizon
let's take a dance on the awning
ascertain if there's anything left
if nothing's found
then I'll be rising
lifting myself back onto the shelf
A contest entry
- Wherever you are stop and write! by alexandrathegreat.
1800 points, ended October 24, 2007, 31 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
-
Oh I was intrigued by your similie you used in the first stanza. Nice. I'd appreciate if you choose a title. without the brackets sorry they annoy me. This reminds me of Virginia Woolfe a great writer. One other criticism I think you should either rhyme or not. Stick with it or drop it. I'd prefer you drop it. Thank you for entering.



